Health has long been a hotly topic on societal issues. There are multiple approaches to keep ourselves in good nick. It is controversial that either young people or old people are more proper to do physical exercise. In my view, physical exercise is of equal important not only for the elderly but also for the younger people, especially those sedentary workers.
First of all, compared with the aged people, younger people like desk-bound laborers lack time to take physical exercise. The aged people who are already enjoying their retirement life are more likely to have a chance to stretch their bodies at a park downstairs. However, the time these workers spend on exercise is limited since they have to work during the day. For instance, in China, there is a working mode called “996”, meaning that you have to start working at 9 in the morning and work until the other 9 in the evening, and constantly work for six days a week. Under such a burdensome schedule, workers are already physically and mentally exhausted. But their need for exercising is still there. It is hard for them to squeeze exercise into their calendars. Therefore, physical exercise is more urgent for this group of people.
Besides, by constantly exposing to the status of high competitions and pressure, young people are more likely at risk of physical and mental diseases. The study, conducted by World Health Organization (WHO), revealed that the age of having cancers is becoming younger. And further investigations state that the number of lung cancers amongst people under 45 has significant increase over these two decades The most contributing factor to this is smoking, which is highly related to anxiety and other negative moods. And doing exercise has been proven as an effective method against depression and mental diseases. Thus, the young generation really needs to take physical exercise regularly.
Last, young generations are lack of the awareness of exercising. The aged people who have some diseases when they were young understand the importance of keeping fit so that they will stick to exercise as part of their daily life. However, young people are likely to have a lower value of physical exercise. This is mainly because they may think that they are still young and do not need to pay attention to their health. But it is too late to be aware of diseases.
To sum up, according to the aforementioned reasons, I strongly think that physical exercise for young people is as important as for the elderly.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: You used an adverb ('hotly') instead an adjective, or a noun ('topic') instead of another adjective.
Health has long been a hotly topic on societal issues. There are multiple ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, may, really, so, still, therefore, thus, as for, for instance, first of all, in my view, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2095.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 421.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97624703088 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62495350317 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529691211401 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 666.0 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.9699863499 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.0869565217 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3043478261 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.304757631539 0.236089414692 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0908867606509 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.084483604541 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194930137015 0.150856017488 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0302377584814 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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