Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that young people should overcome a lot of problems caused by unfair rules that societies force them. Contrary to this popular belief, there are still those who argue that all of these rules were created to care citizens in society and they are almost necessary and useful. However, I to a great extent, agree with this idea that the rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.
First and foremost, today families eliminate young people from freedom to make a decision for their own lives. This a mutual concern of most people in between the age of 20 to 30, that their parents dictate their obey and decisions to them. For example, most parents do not allow their children for marriage before graduation from university. Last year my friend and her fiance, break up because their parents did not agree with their wedding before finishing study at university.
Another significant fact that should be taken into consideration is that the high tax limited young people from staring business. For instance, last year my brother and some of his friends were going to establish a chemical laboratory. Nonetheless, their plan was not successful, because they should pay huge tax which could not be covered with their income. However, we need some laws that can provide a smoother business condition for young people, especially at the beginning of work.
Finally, yet importantly, some government's rules are not fair. For example, students after graduation from national universities should work in the company that determined by the government. I believe that this rule is not fair. First, national universities are the best academic center in our country, and the most talented students interested to study there. However, this rule has been led to some of them became unwilling to study in these universities. Second, some of these companies are not fit for these gifted people and it leads to fading their intelligence.
On the basis of reasons that were mentioned above, I am convinced that the rules that societies today expect young people to follow are too strict. Because today parents controlled all aspects of children's life and high tax confined young people to start their own business, and because of some government's rules are not fair.
- TPO 45 66
- TPO 45- In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own 60
- TPO 31: Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past. 73
- People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries 88
- Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they already know how to do well. 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 303, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the best academic center in our country, and the most talented students intereste...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, nonetheless, second, so, still, for example, for instance, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1947.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 384.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0703125 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54372435277 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.518229166667 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 603.0 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.176969104 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.473684211 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2105263158 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.52631578947 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229400425511 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0808071250413 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.120117925427 0.0737576698707 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151200615003 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.117302863917 0.0645574589148 182% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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