There is a controversial debate about people who have the most influence on students. Some groups of people may hold the view that teacher have significant influence on students. However, other groups may have different views and feel that friend are more influential. In my vantage point, I am concur with the latter group because of the age difference, and the relative closeness to each other.
First, students are influenced by the people who spend with them lots of time. Teacher may influence some students because of their charisma and look. However, they are relatively of far distance to students Close friends may be together for seven hours a day and six days a week. Thus, such long period of exposure makes them influenced by one another. For instance, during school, I spend lots of time with my close friend. As a result, he had so much influence on m. So, Inspite of being away from each other after graduation for 20 years, I still go to visit him in London, and we plan our vacation together. Moreover, because of this close relationship, Surprisingly, we both studied the same subject and we end up working in the same field.
Secondly, students are influenced with people of their same age. A teacher may have influence a student by skills. However, teachers are much older than students.This gap in age, creates a distance between the teacher and the student, which eventually leads to a temporary influence. Therefore, while the influence by students is permanent, the influence by teachers is short living. A good example to show my viewpoint is my relationship with my friend. Because of our age proximity, our friendship lasted for a long period of time.
Finally, the aforementioned points are the first to cross my mind at a glance. However, it is by no mean the only reason I hold this view. In fact, there is another subtle reason, which a study that the conducted in the school journal, which revealed that, friend do influence each other in a significant way. The study was conducted on 120 students from different schools inorder to prevent any bias in result.
To wrap up, contemplating the aforementioned reason, one realizes that student become influence by people who are most close to them. Moreover, the closer the age to one another, the more influenced they are.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, thus, while, for instance, in fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1922.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 393.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89058524173 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75096212345 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.513994910941 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 585.9 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.820571825 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.0833333333 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.375 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.70833333333 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223950613369 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0745809600391 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0779211719782 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126079657833 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0720945104571 0.0645574589148 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.2 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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