Education system is the backbone a nation and it is undoubtedly known that a government must pay attention to this sector for the development of a country. But question may arise about how the fund should be distributed, should kinder-garden education be given more importance or university education budget should be considered with higher priority. Personally I disagree with the statement that it is more important to allocate more money on young children's education rather than universities. The following paragraphs represent a cursory glance at the most compelling reasons.
First of all, I think childhood is time for playing and learning things from congenial environment. Family should play a pivotal role at this point and schools can help kids to learn in a place where they can be socialized. Childhood is time for a person to build his character and learn humanity. It is not needed to be equipped with advanced technology or large places for that, and therefore spending large amount of money is not necessary at this stage. Let the children learn things from natural resources, follow senior citizens to learn to be a better person and enjoy learning without any pressure.
On the other hand, after getting basic education and hardship, the best people of a country get chance in universities. Therefore, to utilize their capability, government must provide proper opportunities to them by arranging modern equipment, advanced training materials, libraries with lots of books on diverse fields and manage efficient teachers to guide them. To make advanced scientific research and to acquire and manage large amount of data, to communicate with people of other countries and to buy modern machinary, large amount of money need to be allocated.
Lastly, developed countries always try to get the best brain to be involved in research work. So, if a country can not provide opportunity to its people, then it is normal that they would leave country to get the best chance. So, it is needed to make internship program and create job sectors, to prevent brain drain scenario. Therefore, government should plan accordingly and allocate budget considering the development of a country depends on the education system.
- TOEFL T P O 31 - Integrated Writing Task 3
- TPO 31 A fossil skeleton of a dinosaur called Sinosauropteryx, preserved in volcanic ash, was discovered in Liaoning, China, in 1996. Interestingly, the fossil included a pattern of fine lines surrounding the skeletal bones. Some paleontologists interpret 80
- TOEFL T P O 31 - Integrated Writing Task 3
- TPO 31 A fossil skeleton of a dinosaur called Sinosauropteryx, preserved in volcanic ash, was discovered in Liaoning, China, in 1996. Interestingly, the fossil included a pattern of fine lines surrounding the skeletal bones. Some paleontologists interpret 80
- TPO 37- One of the threats to endangered sea turtle species is the use of nets by commercial shrimp-fishing boats. When turtles get accidentally caught in the nets, they cannot rise to the surface of the ocean to breathe, and they die. Some people suggest 78
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, first, if, lastly, may, so, then, therefore, i think, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1876.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 359.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22562674095 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88292357875 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551532033426 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 584.1 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.9575754879 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.25 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4375 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4375 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226261734075 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0738258567634 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0931484768022 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128407408654 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0984658484891 0.0645574589148 153% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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