It should be acknowledged that professional path and career plays a crucial part in our lives as an adults. Although some people, If asked, they would say that university should prepare their students for highpaying career, They should focus on building students skills to compete not only only in academic field but also in general taskes. The basis for my views is as the following.
Students should possess the passionate to endure certian career. Given that employees spend most of the time at work place, work could br quiet boring. However, employees who are enthusiastic and passionate for their work, they are more willing to work more time at their work place. For example, because he love being a pharmacist, A friend of mine had no problems stay after work hours to help his peers at work. He told me that he feels happy when he spend most of his time at work as he love what he do. As a result, the company promoted him to pharmacy manager position with higher salary than his colleges. If he just work for money, he would not have the energy and power to succeed at his work as he currently is.
In addition, skills and tallanted is more important the money. people make more money when they are gifted with skills and talante. for instance, soccer ball player average salary is 200 time more above average individual income. A soccer ball player who worked to enrich his talent and skills could not only preforum a task he like, but also he could gain extraordenery income. If he divert their primary goal to seek for money, they could make far less than they currently make.
Finally, money is not the only factor for happiness. A study done at the University Of California indicated that people with high salary are more vernable to helath issues like depressed, high blood pressure or heart complication. for example, because they are required to aschive more taskes in a limited time as an exchange for high salary, my friends suffer from anxiety, social problems. His life is just endeavor to finish taskes. If he work for another job with a lower salary, he could enjoy his live and interact with friends and lower health complication risk.
As a conclusion we can safely say even though money is important part in our live, money shoould not be the only thing that we are looking for. Choosing a career that we are passionate for or work in a good work environment has a positive effect in our lives. Therefore, universities should prepare their students to get more familiar with their skills and passions insted of prepare them for high paying career.
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as an adults
as an adult
Sentence: Although some people, If asked, they would say that university should prepare their students for highpaying career, They should focus on building students skills to compete not only only in academic field but also in general taskes.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to students and skills
Description: The fragment only only contains a repeated word
Suggestion: Delete a possible duplicate word:
However, employees who are enthusiastic and passionate for their work, they are more willing to work
However, employees who are enthusiastic and passionate for their work are more willing to work
because he love being a pharmacist
because he loves being a pharmacist
when he spend most of his time at work as he love what he do.
when he spends most of his time at work as he loves what he does.
is more important the money.
is more important than the money.
Sentence: In addition, skills and tallanted is more important the money. people make more money when they are gifted with skills and talante. for instance, soccer ball player average salary is 200 time more above average individual income.
Description: The fragment and tallanted is is rare
Description: A noun, singular, common is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to player and average
Sentence: A soccer ball player who worked to enrich his talent and skills could not only preforum a task he like, but also he could gain extraordenery income.
Description: The fragment he like , is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace like with verb, past tense
Sentence: If he divert their primary goal to seek for money, they could make far less than they currently make.
Description: The fragment he divert their is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace divert with verb, past tense
Sentence: If he work for another job with a lower salary, he could enjoy his live and interact with friends and lower health complication risk.
Description: The fragment he work for is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace work with verb, past tense
Sentence: Therefore, universities should prepare their students to get more familiar with their skills and passions insted of prepare them for high paying career.
Description: The token of is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to of and prepare
Sentence: Although some people, If asked, they would say that university should prepare their students for highpaying career, They should focus on building students skills to compete not only only in academic field but also in general taskes.
Error: highpaying Suggestion: high paying
Error: taskes Suggestion: takes
Sentence: Students should possess the passionate to endure certian career.
Error: certian Suggestion: certain
Sentence: Given that employees spend most of the time at work place, work could br quiet boring.
Error: br Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: In addition, skills and tallanted is more important the money. people make more money when they are gifted with skills and talante. for instance, soccer ball player average salary is 200 time more above average individual income.
Error: tallanted Suggestion: talented
Error: talante Suggestion: balance
Sentence: A soccer ball player who worked to enrich his talent and skills could not only preforum a task he like, but also he could gain extraordenery income.
Error: extraordenery Suggestion: extraordinary
Error: preforum Suggestion: perform
Sentence: A study done at the University Of California indicated that people with high salary are more vernable to helath issues like depressed, high blood pressure or heart complication. for example, because they are required to aschive more taskes in a limited time as an exchange for high salary, my friends suffer from anxiety, social problems.
Error: helath Suggestion: health
Error: vernable Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: taskes Suggestion: takes
Error: aschive Suggestion: archive
Sentence: His life is just endeavor to finish taskes.
Error: taskes Suggestion: takes
Sentence: As a conclusion we can safely say even though money is important part in our live, money shoould not be the only thing that we are looking for.
Error: shoould Suggestion: should
Sentence: Therefore, universities should prepare their students to get more familiar with their skills and passions insted of prepare them for high paying career.
Error: insted Suggestion: No alternate word
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 12 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 13 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 20 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 12 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 13 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 451 350
No. of Characters: 2075 1500
No. of Different Words: 219 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.608 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.601 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.343 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 142 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 86 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 56 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.55 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.934 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.315 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.538 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.191 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 98, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an adult' or simply 'adults'?
Suggestion: an adult; adults
...er plays a crucial part in our lives as an adults. Although some people, If asked, they w...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 286, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: only
...building students skills to compete not only only in academic field but also in general t...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 297, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e time at their work place. For example, because he love being a pharmacist, A fr...
^^
Line 3, column 310, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'loves'.
Suggestion: loves
...ir work place. For example, because he love being a pharmacist, A friend of mine ha...
^^^^
Line 3, column 456, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'spends'.
Suggestion: spends
... He told me that he feels happy when he spend most of his time at work as he love wha...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 493, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'loves'.
Suggestion: loves
...he spend most of his time at work as he love what he do. As a result, the company pr...
^^^^
Line 3, column 506, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'does'.
Suggestion: does
... of his time at work as he love what he do. As a result, the company promoted him ...
^^
Line 5, column 64, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: People
... tallanted is more important the money. people make more money when they are gifted wi...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 133, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: For
...hey are gifted with skills and talante. for instance, soccer ball player average sa...
^^^
Line 5, column 386, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'diverts'.
Suggestion: diverts
... could gain extraordenery income. If he divert their primary goal to seek for money, t...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 232, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: For
...h blood pressure or heart complication. for example, because they are required to a...
^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in addition', 'in general', 'as a result']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.25 0.229887763892 109% => OK
Verbs: 0.151209677419 0.158761421928 95% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0866935483871 0.0866891130778 100% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0463709677419 0.046263068375 100% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0927419354839 0.0685040099705 135% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.135080645161 0.118717715034 114% => OK
Participles: 0.0282258064516 0.0351676179071 80% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.42610973097 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0241935483871 0.0309702414327 78% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0564516129032 0.0887237588012 64% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0282258064516 0.0209618222197 135% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0100806451613 0.0139019557991 73% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2584.0 2387.08602151 108% => OK
No of words: 451.0 408.028673835 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.72949002217 5.86048508987 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.48200974243 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.330376940133 0.338922669872 97% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.219512195122 0.251872472559 87% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.137472283814 0.174417080927 79% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0753880266075 0.112833075102 67% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42610973097 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50110864745 0.524397521467 96% => OK
Word variations: 57.0586341977 59.2087087015 96% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6684587814 111% => OK
Sentence length: 19.6086956522 20.5533526081 95% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.3961350087 48.84282405 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.347826087 120.699889404 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6086956522 20.5533526081 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.608695652174 0.644075263715 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.54480286738 198% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 41.5599151644 45.7405998639 91% => OK
Elegance: 1.42361111111 1.45489161554 98% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206162980835 0.300154397459 69% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.119179478548 0.103427244359 115% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0871493569695 0.0752933317313 116% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.466744704169 0.497263757937 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.130422313006 0.151897553556 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0765121729398 0.114077575197 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0448808581502 0.0781384742642 57% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.23625640708 0.336927656856 70% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0558264735405 0.067059652881 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140813565826 0.210909579961 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0422142552819 0.0618886996521 68% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8870967742 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.91756272401 122% => OK
Positive topic words: 12.0 8.42114695341 142% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.75985663082 181% => OK
Total topic words: 20.0 13.6433691756 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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