Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
No one can cast a shadow of doubt on the fact that in today’s sophisticated world we live in, the roles of young people in the society are very crucial. Cooperation of young people for making significant decisions can have a great influence not only on their destiny but also on the next generations. Though, dealing with social issues in the community or government by younger ones could have some conspicuous advantages, its negative influences on the society are the subject of contention. Some believe that in these days young persons do not impact on the important decisions in the society, while others oppose this idea. I personally concur with the former groups’ idea. In what follows, my own opinions would be delineated.
The first reason coming to mind is that most of the young individuals are deal with their routine and personal works. It is clearly evident that people have some special goals in their lives. Some of them make plans to go to the university and after that attend to their desirable job. Thus, most of the youths pay much attention to themselves. So, they do not try to get involved to ongoing political, social and economic issues in their community. For more illustration, take a youth trying to graduate from a university. Due to the fact that, nowadays, a job market is very competitive, he has to find a profitable occupation in order to make more money. Therefore, his mind is allocated to seek a job. Even after getting the job, he would follow other aims in his life. On the contrary, elder people like my father is always involved in the political problems which are related to the government. As it turns out; the young people often don’t spend time for making a good effect on the significant decision making of their society.
The second reason is rooted in the insufficient education of young people about the importance of contribution to politics, economics, and social sciences. Universities and schools often provide obligatory courses or programs for their students that are related to their major. They have to concentrate on their lessons in order to pass them. Thus, cooperation in the society would not be occurred by them due to having inadequate information. We should take into account that newspapers and other public medias like television or radio can create an appropriate environment to promote the students’ general knowledge about prominent events and decisions in the community. For instance, according to one statistics data which is published on May 2015 from the Iran Statistical Institute, most of Iran’s universities have focused on the academic progress of their students in order to enhance their ranking amongst other national universities. It follows that youths don’t care about substantial issues or happening going on in their country.
In conclusion, based on aforementioned reasons which contribute to involving young people in serious decisions in the country, I want to fortify my standpoint. Concentration on the personal purposes such as education, job, and emotional requirements and having not enough information and instruction are two important factors to indicate that youths do not have practical influences on their momentous issues and decisions in their community.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'while', 'as to', 'for instance', 'in conclusion', 'such as', 'on the contrary']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.236363636364 0.229887763892 103% => OK
Verbs: 0.145454545455 0.158761421928 92% => OK
Adjectives: 0.110743801653 0.0866891130778 128% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0347107438017 0.046263068375 75% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0578512396694 0.0685040099705 84% => OK
Prepositions: 0.130578512397 0.118717715034 110% => OK
Participles: 0.0396694214876 0.0351676179071 113% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.95160668496 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0396694214876 0.0309702414327 128% => OK
Particles: 0.00165289256198 0.00188951952338 87% => OK
Determiners: 0.0809917355372 0.0887237588012 91% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0132231404959 0.0209618222197 63% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00826446280992 0.0139019557991 59% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3302.0 2387.08602151 138% => OK
No of words: 532.0 408.028673835 130% => OK
Chars per words: 6.20676691729 5.86048508987 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80261649409 4.48200974243 107% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.374060150376 0.338922669872 110% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.28007518797 0.251872472559 111% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.216165413534 0.174417080927 124% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.169172932331 0.112833075102 150% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95160668496 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 278.0 212.727598566 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522556390977 0.524397521467 100% => OK
Word variations: 63.7877793892 59.2087087015 108% => OK
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6684587814 126% => OK
Sentence length: 20.4615384615 20.5533526081 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.9543015436 48.84282405 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.0 120.699889404 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4615384615 20.5533526081 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.576923076923 0.644075263715 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.54480286738 18% => OK
Readability: 48.4690572585 45.7405998639 106% => OK
Elegance: 1.70833333333 1.45489161554 117% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.398643177489 0.300154397459 133% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0915698471211 0.103427244359 89% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0465417896873 0.0752933317313 62% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.464626818688 0.497263757937 93% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.150276102405 0.151897553556 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.147018727167 0.114077575197 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0795093121046 0.0781384742642 102% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.46876589066 0.336927656856 139% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.081513727214 0.067059652881 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.303278576521 0.210909579961 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0433081882216 0.0618886996521 70% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8870967742 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.86379928315 129% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.91756272401 203% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 11.0 8.42114695341 131% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 8.0 2.75985663082 290% => OK
Total topic words: 23.0 13.6433691756 169% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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