There is no shortage debate about the effect of advertising on human behaviour, In my opinion, the advertisement has a negative impact people’s attitude and on their rational thinking. I feel this way because of two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, in our daily life, we are exposed to a variety of advertisement, some of them are related to sport, beauty products, clothes and others. In the advertisement, companies are promoting their product on the basis of their white lies, however, as a viewer, we are the facts, but at the same time we are under the influence of that particular advertisement. Therefore, it affects our cognitive capacity. My own experience is a compelling example of this. I have seen an advertisement related to honey, according to that it was a pure honey, however, I already knew that the product is fake, but I was under the influence of the advertisement and as a result, I bought it. For this reason, I strongly believe that advertisement alters human behaviour in a negative direction.
Secondly, most of us are busy in our day to day life and are stressed with lots of work, and in our spare time, we want to relax by watching television. However, these days most of the channels display advertisement more than an entertaining program and in addition to it, most of them are fake. It affects our body physiology very badly, we feel more stressed and restless. For instance, my wife is working in a multinational company and her job is very stressful. Last year, she started watching television to lease her stress, but it went wrong and she became more irritating and short tamper and it was very tough to handle her. In the last, we went to the doctor., and he helped a lot to overcome this problem and in this way, we were able to the cause of the problem “advertisement”.
In conclusion, people’s behaviour and their rational thinking are negatively affected by the advertisement. It has serious consequences for our health and behaviour.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 174, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lothes and others. In the advertisement, companies are promoting their product on...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1693.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 348.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86494252874 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20275733984 2.67179642975 120% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.528735632184 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 548.1 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.8634668974 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.8125 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.75 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.875 5.45110844103 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166251454709 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0510962472859 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0557256855932 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118070676792 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0511520155223 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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