sports and social activities for student is a crucial part of university. because they can help to student to be alwalys fresh and raise their efficcancy. In general, some people think that it's a good idea to pay special attention to student's activities, while the others disagree. From my point of view, I think that doing sport can be an important part of students life and I agree with the passage disccusion for two reasons.
The main reason is that sport and excercise can keep students more healthy. It helps them to have powerfull muscles and high immune system against any diseas. For example, when I was In my BSc, I suffered from lots of problem. The most important reason behind that was doing sport. Since the university did't prepared any facility for students they usually had such a problem. Because of that the university health care expenses was so much. Also another consequence of painful body in student was their tiredness that prevent them to be much effective. So, preparing enough facilities for student to increase their healthy is as important as other financial supports like libraries.
The second reason is happiness. If the student be more happy and joyfull it rises their ability and can help to university budget too. For example The time that I was in my master in another university , there were some facility for students like body builing hall, footbal pitch, swimming pool and gym . During my master I ran out of all the problems that I encountered during my BSc because of having more joyfull time and happiness and also facilities that let students to gather together. Moreover, I can remember that we founded a team in footbal and could beat other university and because of that the university gained 10000 dollars. So, puting enough money on students facilities can bring them more happiness and provide more money for university.
In sum, investing on students facilities can have lots of benefit for university. and can help them to be more happy and always help to their healthiness that can finally raise the level of university in different aspect like moneymaking and effective studying procedure. I think all the universities must devote special budget for students facilities.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Sports
sports and social activities for student is a ...
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Suggestion: Because
...tudent is a crucial part of university. because they can help to student to be alwalys ...
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Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...ncy. In general, some people think that its a good idea to pay special attention to...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun problem seems to be countable; consider using: 'lots of problems'.
Suggestion: lots of problems
..., when I was In my BSc, I suffered from lots of problem. The most important reason behind that ...
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Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...udents they usually had such a problem. Because of that the university health care expe...
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...rsity health care expenses was so much. Also another consequence of painful body in ...
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Suggestion:
...cond reason is happiness. If the student be more happy and joyfull it rises their...
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...I was in my master in another university , there were some facility for students l...
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Suggestion: .
...ll, footbal pitch, swimming pool and gym . During my master I ran out of all the p...
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...ause of that the university gained 10000 dollars. So, puting enough money on stud...
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...an have lots of benefit for university. and can help them to be more happy and alwa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, if, moreover, second, so, while, for example, i think, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1861.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 373.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98927613941 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62191244875 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498659517426 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 585.0 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.6434886024 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.619047619 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7619047619 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.80952380952 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0919339489314 0.236089414692 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0367315102199 0.076458572812 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0464932972163 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0658287556139 0.150856017488 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0346716214331 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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