It is generally agreed that playing outdoor games with friends would be more helpful for the children's development rather than depending on the modern technology. Personally I am prone to believe that technology ruins the children's instinct of learning and acquiring knowledge from nature and, therefore, they should go outside and need to become more sociable. I hold this position since it will prevent them from living in the seclusion; get fresh air; boost their mind; and become brilliant. As a result, they will have healthier life through out the life. For instance, a child who relies more on smartphones may get highly attached to it and become one-sighted and never learn to communicate with people. So, he will have to face complexity in his life when he has to interact with people.
Although the modern technology has great advantages over people's life, they do have equal disadvantages if not used carefully. As we know that, mind of the children get shaped by the environment they interact with. If we let them to depend more on technology they will learn things from them. There are lots of pros and cons of technology. As with unshaped mind of children, they are unable to decide what is good or right for their development. so, they may get involve excessively into it; may spend their valuable time and may not focused into their betterment. As a result, they may move towards self-destruction
Furthermore, playing outside with friends help them to become more gregarious. While playing with friends they will get opportunity to share their knowledge with each other; become more innovative; get chance to know about their feelings and emotions. In the book named emotional intelligence, it is stated that the emotional intelligence is more important than general knowledge, which can only be acquire by being touched with the people not with the computers, smartphones and videos games.
It is not always the case that modern technology has disadvantages; However, they do have advantage over children's development. Playing video games for fun may help them boost their mind; make them more creative and help to solve the difficult puzzle, but they should not be played excessively which may ruin their thinking capacity and social life. Living in isolation for long period of time can damage their ability to think and may lead them depression. As a result, they may indulge into the self destruction.
Finally, it is always better to let children to play outdoor games with friends rather them encouraging them to rely on technology like computers, smartphones and video games. If in case they need to have given it, it should done with the parental care.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 539, Rule ID: THROUGH_OUT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'throughout'?
Suggestion: throughout
...a result, they will have healthier life through out the life. For instance, a child who rel...
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Line 3, column 216, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... by the environment they interact with. If we let them to depend more on technolog...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...is good or right for their development. so, they may get involve excessively into ...
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...cial life. Living in isolation for long period of time can damage their ability to think and m...
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Line 9, column 226, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[2]
Message: Did you mean 'have done' or 'do'?
Suggestion: have done; do
...e they need to have given it, it should done with the parental care.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, furthermore, however, if, may, so, therefore, while, as to, for instance, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 9.8082437276 224% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2246.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 445.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04719101124 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71530982784 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494382022472 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 683.1 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.5326375174 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.952380952 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1904761905 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.71428571429 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251060200567 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0848244749749 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0870348674611 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170484990118 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0548807800309 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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