People spend most of their life on their job and all of them want to be successful in their job. It's every people's wish to have a job which can successfully try hard for it and make sure that they will prosper in it. However, it's been a wide concern for some people that even if we try as hard as possible, in this modern society it's much harder to succeed in comparison to the past. Another group of people might believe, even today, being prosperous in job is not that difficult. Nevertheless, it's not impossible to find a job with a guaranteed future, I suppose it's been a bit trickier than how it was in the past. Now in the following article, I try to vindicate my standpoint.
To begin with, population of people on the earth has grown significantly during the past decades and every day that is passed, this population is increasing. I believe the greater the population, the harder is the competition between them. It's obvious that when there are more people to compete with each other, the chance of finding a good job with better salary and more thriving future is lower. For instance, recently, when my uncle wanted to prepare for the entrance exam of a company, the competitors' population was 5 times more than what was wanted. And thus, being accepted in the exam was very arduous. Simply, it meant that from each 5 persons, just one of them would be accepted.
In addition, rate of not finding any job has increased too. Let alone finding a job with a good future. Annually, the number of people graduated from universities all over the world is exponentially rising. Although their number has increased noticeably, types of different jobs are still limited. Of course we have many jobs available that weren't practical before, yet in my opinion, comparing to the population growth, this rate is not persuasive. Most of graduated students are in search of good jobs, but statistics don't say good news. Relatively, in the past people didn't spend several years in universities and were satisfied with any job. They also tried harder in what they were doing, and thus with great effort, their success was guaranteed.
To wrap it up, competition between great number of people around the world has made it really difficult to find a good job. Besides, although the population has grown significantly, there are limited types of jobs and all of these have led to an increase in rate of unemployment. All of these reasons show that finding a job with successful future is harder than what was in the past. However, what I said is not overgeneralized to any condition and there are still lots of people with great effort having good jobs with a bright future.
- tpo-50 3
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- TPO 39 - integrated writing 3
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 495, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'competitors'' or 'competitor's'?
Suggestion: competitors'; competitor's
...for the entrance exam of a company, the competitors population was 5 times more than what w...
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Line 3, column 341, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: weren't
...course we have many jobs available that werent practical before, yet in my opinion, co...
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Line 3, column 520, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... in search of good jobs, but statistics dont say good news. Relatively, in the past ...
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Line 3, column 571, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...od news. Relatively, in the past people didnt spend several years in universities and...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, nevertheless, really, so, still, thus, for instance, i suppose, in addition, of course, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2202.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 469.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69509594883 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65364457471 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64791980764 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477611940299 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 685.8 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.4342777782 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.75 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5416666667 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.20833333333 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18680563988 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0601633728922 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0505600983881 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128941032827 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.031247134754 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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