Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
The life styles of people have been changed dramatically during the past few decades with the different phases of revolutions in terms of education, technology and development of the entire world. In the fast moving world, decision making is of paramount importance to survive successfully. Some people believe that in the past, young people depended too much on their parents while today they are better decision makers and others believe that young people are still poor decision makers. In my opinion young people have improved their skills related to decision making with the increased access to information, different opportunities they get to exercise their own decisions and the change of their mindset to be independent in choosing the options available.
To begin with, it is important to identify the access to information had made the lives of modern-day young people different from early days. That has brought people a better understanding about what is happening around them to make better decisions with a complete analysis based on the parameters identified through online research. For an example, the leading roles of many business organizations are the young people, they make radical decisions with a proper understanding on the market factors with the business management skills that they equipped with a systematic education and self-learning platforms. Additionally, education has marked a hurdle in the access to information via the technological improvements along with it.
Secondly, young people have gone through a wide range of experiences making them confident to think on their own. From the day they were born, they are moving close to the world more than their parents at their young age. During our grand parent’s regime, children were at home just playing with their siblings and running all around the village with no idea at all. However now the child has been used to adapt to different circumstances such as being at home alone, doing their own tasks on their own from their early age. Moreover, this has provided them with different opportunities to learn through mistakes from their childhood to be great decision makers when they are matured.
Furthermore, the change of the social life of people has played a major role in making young people independent. Back then, people were connected to their families with very powerful family bonds where they had more obedience towards parents more than showing their respect with the conventional mindset people had. Whereas this situation is quite different now with the young people being away from home from their teenager age either for education or to start professional lifestyles, making them closer to their friends more than parents. This has provided them the opportunity to think individually and prove others that they can make their lives successful with the proper decision making process.
In conclusion, the changes in the social structure, development of technology and specially the mind set of people to take challenges and to learn from them have made young people more intelligent in terms of arriving to best decisions than the ancient days where young people had to live with the orthodox mindset.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, then, whereas, while, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 90.0 52.1666666667 173% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2720.0 1977.66487455 138% => OK
No of words: 514.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29182879377 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76146701107 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72956366429 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.476653696498 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 824.4 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.5632014906 48.9658058833 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.111111111 100.406767564 150% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5555555556 20.6045352989 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.72222222222 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.493183177104 0.236089414692 209% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.178412494794 0.076458572812 233% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0935628170332 0.0737576698707 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.306750041873 0.150856017488 203% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0882755566502 0.0645574589148 137% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 11.7677419355 151% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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