Parents have always played an important role in youngster's lives. Most parents interfere in the process of decision making of their childeren. Although some believe that childeren have always depended on their parents while making decisions, I believe that today young people are more independent and able to make decisions on their own. I will elaborate on my point of view through the following paragraphs.
to begin with, media has a significant influence on young people's living methods. Most people today use Instagram, Facebook, and other similar social media. They easily get affected by other's lives. When they see that some of their peers are quite independent and are responsible for their own lives or even live alone they want to do the same even unconsciously. To illustrate, I have a friend who lives in Canada. I see her Instagram posts that she is traveling alone all the time and barely meet her parents and she is responsible for her own decisions. I used to be dependent too much on my parents. They always observed my activities and interfered in my decisions. However after seeing my friend's way of life I couldn't stand my parents advises anymore. It is completely observable that these days young people prefer to be the only one responsible for their decisions.
In addition to the influence of media, the short amount of time young people spend with family is also an important reason which made them independent decision makers. These days young people spend most of their time at schools, universities or with their friends out of the home. Therefore, it is impossible for them to be dependent on their parents. They have accepted their individual role in society and the fact that there are a lot of situations that they can't ask their parents for advice. For example, I barely meet my parents for 5 or 6 hours a week. I spend most of my time at university or with my friends and I have turned in to an independent person. This is an important reason why youngsters are better decision makers today.
in summation, by considering the effects of media and the fact that young people are too busy to spend so much time with family, it is easy to say that they are turning in to independent decision makers. Even if it is against what they want, they are experiencing various situations that they should decide all on their own.
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- If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying 70
- Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize. 71
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 76
- TPO 54 Integrated Writing 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, therefore, while, for example, in addition, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1952.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78431372549 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64966737846 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.46568627451 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 615.6 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.2005572843 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.8695652174 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7391304348 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.47826086957 5.45110844103 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.387289661226 0.236089414692 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112322812145 0.076458572812 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0916677090694 0.0737576698707 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.254661425146 0.150856017488 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0821584216675 0.0645574589148 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.27 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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