Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents' jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents' jobs.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Even though there is a widely held notion that children would take advantage from jobs that are similar to their parents', I subscribe to the view that in the modern world, children should pursue their dream jobs and choose the career in which they are highly interested. My reasons of support are organized as the following.
To begin with, an individual is likely to prosper in a career that he or she enjoys and is enthusiastic about. If one's parents force him to choose the same kind of job as theirs, he would lack the requisite motivation to become successful in that field since he hasn't selected the job voluntarily. For example, my father is a renowned doctor in our town, and has always encouraged my brother to attend the medical school to be placed in my father's position after his retirement. However, my brother is exclusively passionate about music, and tried to study music as his minor field as well as medical science. After a while, our family realized that his true talents lie in music and he could never become a successful doctor, and my father's persistence would only prevent him from becoming a skillful musician rather than helping him. As a result, we started a few serious debates with my father and eventually convince him that it is the best for my brother to continue his education in music. The more one focus on his interests and expertise, the better results he will accomplish in the future.
Additionally, many people don't possess a good career and most of them have significant efforts to provide their children a good education so they would be able to qualify for careers other than their own unsuccessful jobs. These parents would even confront their kids when they decide to choose jobs analogous to their parents' since they are regretful about their job and don't want their children to suffer the way they suffer from those jobs. The parents’ experience are significantly beneficial in this manner.
However, there are also many people with prosperous businesses and careers and their knowledge and experiences can be an important asset in their children's success in the same field. For example, my uncle is an architecture and his son studied the same major since his father could provide him all the necessary knowledge in the field and could give him many job opportunities in his own construction projects. This tasks are essential to the health of the society.
In conclusion, I believe that choosing the same career as parents' is not always the best option because the children might be talented in different areas. Also many parents aren't happy with their jobs and selecting similar careers by their children isn't feasible at all.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, thus, well, while, for example, in conclusion, kind of, as a result, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2253.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 457.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92997811816 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61605404718 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507658643326 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 697.5 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.5202063047 48.9658058833 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.529411765 100.406767564 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8823529412 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.88235294118 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289717735612 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0936788749722 0.076458572812 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0957190001798 0.0737576698707 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197667529594 0.150856017488 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.088270294768 0.0645574589148 137% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.