Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Responsibilities have changed over the past few years and parents want to learn what is the best way to teach their children how to be responsible. Some suggest that having children to take care of animals is a good idea. Personally, I think using animals as a source of learning is a good idea. I feel this way for three reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.

Children will learn how to provide the best care for others. Everyone needs care even animals. They need food, cleaning, walking, and swimming. Provide a pet for a child definitely the child will learn how to be responsible to get all pet necessity. My own experience is a compelling example. When I graduated from elementary school, my father bought me husky. I have grown with her. She is a nice girl. moreover, my father gives me some money every month, so I can buy some food for her. I walk her every day after school with my mother. I learn how to clean her, swim with her every weekend in our amazing pool. As you can see, I learn how to taking care of an animal, provide food, and enjoy our time. I have learned a lot so, it will be easy to take care of my children in the future.

In addition, children will learn to be responsible not only for humans but also for animals. By taking care of an animal, they will learn that animals have needs. They love to be in the family. As a result, the children will learn how to protect our world by decreasing oil consumption, reducing the use of plastic, and using clean energy. For instance, after I got my pet. I open the internet to learn about husky and how to take care of it. I read how they need to live in cold weather and how humans affect the ice. Since then, I have realized that we need to take care of our world. As a result, I recycle, I shared with my friend my idea.

Frankly speaking, sometimes taking care of animals will lead to some diseases, but when we compare the benefits versus the risks, we will see that the benefits are more. For instance, one time I had to be vaccinated because Luci (my dog) bite me on my hand. On the other hand, I learn a lot from her such as walking, love, and loyalty.

All in all, I agree that using animals as a teaching tool for children is a good idea. This is because children will learn how to take care of others, and how to be responsible for all living things.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 405, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Moreover
...ave grown with her. She is a nice girl. moreover, my father gives me some money every mo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, frankly, moreover, so, then, for instance, i feel, i think, in addition, such as, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1914.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 447.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.28187919463 4.8611393121 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36771066251 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.451901565996 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 608.4 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 24.0 9.59856630824 250% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.4933599908 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 61.7419354839 100.406767564 61% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.4193548387 20.6045352989 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.96774193548 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 23.0 11.8709677419 194% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.122585281956 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0378577223352 0.076458572812 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0345322324419 0.0737576698707 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.085081565923 0.150856017488 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0265872769155 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 5.9 11.7677419355 50% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 6.95 10.9000537634 64% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.59 8.01818996416 82% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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