By and large, education plays an important role in flourishing a society. The main element of an efficient education system is undoubtedly the presence of well qualified teachers. Although some believe that people are not being gratitude, in the modern era we live, as much as they were being in the past, others disagree. I hold the view of second group and have two conclusive reasons to support my idea.
Firstly, the development of new world has led to specialization which craves for more qualified teachers. The specialization has vividly pinpointed the importance of teachers and as a result has promoted their social status. For instance I remember vividly how the teachers were misbehaved and taken for granted since village people believed they are wasting the precious time of children by teaching them how to paint or calculate, instead of letting them to feed the herds. They even got aggressive toward our teacher, Mr.Abedi, for he was teaching some students the importance of health care and vaccination. The devil is being ejaculated in the veins of our children through the vaccination shots, village men said repeatedly. The opened window of science and technology in the modern era has opened people's eyes and has convinced them to value the knowledge more and thereby the spring that seeps that, the teachers, as well.
Secondly by formation of educational organizations through the support of state, payment range and health care system for them has seen tremendous changes. Gone are the days where a teacher had to worry about sickness or daily needs. my father was a teacher as a matter of fact, and he told me how he couldn't even pay for a simple cold he caught since the parents were unwilling to pay for education of their child and the few whom felt obligated to return the favor didn't have much money to provide for their own family let alone to pay my father. As a result he had to take care of herds in the morning and start his classes in the noon.
In conclusion the pervasive development of science has healed the social status of teachers comparing to past and the formation of state supported organizations in favor of teachers has enabled them more.
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- Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 80
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- It is better to take a secure job with a low pay than to take a job with a high pay but is easy to lose 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 525, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Abedi
...n got aggressive toward our teacher, Mr.Abedi, for he was teaching some students the ...
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Line 3, column 161, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
... them has seen tremendous changes. Gone are the days where a teacher had to worry a...
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Line 3, column 234, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: My
...to worry about sickness or daily needs. my father was a teacher as a matter of fac...
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Line 3, column 301, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...a matter of fact, and he told me how he couldnt even pay for a simple cold he caught si...
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Line 3, column 467, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...whom felt obligated to return the favor didnt have much money to provide for their ow...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, well, for instance, in conclusion, as a matter of fact, as a result, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 9.8082437276 0% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1817.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 374.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85828877005 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6794178882 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.534759358289 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 565.2 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.0938314767 48.9658058833 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.133333333 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9333333333 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.2 5.45110844103 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125122047123 0.236089414692 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0397309226937 0.076458572812 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0350034871457 0.0737576698707 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.085823432194 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0266394100788 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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