Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Submitted by hmjtpo on Sun, 10/20/2019 - 15:06

Throughout the history family has paled a prominent role in all society. Some people may hold the view that gone are the days when individuals prefer to have extended families. On the other hands, some disagree. Depending on the personality type, personal experiences, and emotional concernc people have various attitude toward this issue. I, personally, think that nowadays the importance of extended family has been decliend. I hold this viewpoint because trend of people's life has been changed and also people are more inclined to their friends rather than their relatives.

Firstly, it goes without saying that people's life is more different than the past. In the past ther was not such complex way of life. Take a communication as an example. People now can readily have contact with each other, while it was more inconveniont in the past. They used their smartphones to send their massages. With this in mind, extended family is going to be less important because people can create numerious contacts with their peers, co-workers and anybody else. In the past, because of the lack of such opportunities in connection, individulas wanted to have big families to share their ideas and have fun times.

Secondly, today's community members are more inclined to their friends. They spend most of thier times at work or school with their friends in compariosn to their families. In the past, people in the extended families used to have parties or other ritual ceremonies together. On the other hand, individuals, especially the youngs, prefer to participate in their peers and co-aged ones' parties. A noteworthy statistics, which are revealed by a social study, show that the number of extended families in our country are going to decrease because of changing trend in the people's mind. In their opinion, they are more inmitit with thier friends rather than grandparents, cousins and aunt.

To put it in a nutshell, it is crystal clear that extended families has lost their position in people's mind and they ares be replaced by friends. Ease of communication and friends is the two major that changed this trend.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 69, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[2]
Message: Did you mean 'different 'from''? 'Different than' is often considered colloquial style.
Suggestion: from
...ing that peoples life is more different than the past. In the past ther was not such...
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Line 5, column 310, Rule ID: MASSAGE_MESSAGE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'messages'?
Suggestion: messages
...ey used their smartphones to send their massages. With this in mind, extended family is ...
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
... participate in their peers and co-aged ones parties. A noteworthy statistics, whic...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... their peers and co-aged ones parties. A noteworthy statistics, which are reveale...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1780.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 349.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10028653295 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63770973841 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532951289398 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 539.1 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.9512735177 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.7619047619 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.619047619 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.66666666667 5.45110844103 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.138934267455 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0465741438773 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0450180557175 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0893338373246 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0438381538544 0.0645574589148 68% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.0 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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