Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

TPO 46- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

With the lightning speed of technological evolution, social media have become prominent parts among youngsters as well as elders. As a result, it becomes easier to know about the lifestyle of celebrities through social media. Many people think that young generation are easily influenced by the opinions of famous entertainers and athletes, whereas some may carry the opposite view. As per my perspective, the letter view sounds rational to me, and I take the position on account for the following reason.

To begin with, youngsters are not mature enough and still developing themselves. Hence, they are easily influenced by celebrities and athletes. On the other side, Elders are mature enough and they have stable mind so others opinion would not create any impact on their mind. Further point, Social media plays a significant role in thinking ability of young generation. To be more specific, according to the research, there are about thirty-five percent juveniles utilize their leisure time for watching television program about their favorite entertainers and athletes. My own experience is a compelling example of this. Whenever, I get time to read newspaper and magazine, I always concentrate on a part of celebrities and sports. Whereas, I have seen my parents always prefer to watch news related to economic subjects and political issues. Therefore, since older have little chances to get connected with celebrities’ ideas, their opinions are less significant to them compared to the teenagers.

Secondly, adolescents have plenty of free time to spend on television as they do not have many responsibilities in their lives. On the other side, elders have less time to spend on social media. They have more burden towards their family and their work. Thus, they have little time to pay attention on entertainments and sports. For instance, my elder brother needs to work eight long hours in the office, and he has a family responsibility as well so he hardly gets any time to spend on television and other leisure activities, so that is why, neither he knows any celebrity and sportsperson, nor their thoughts would affect to my brother’s life.

Moreover, young people have not cleared goals in their lives, and they get easily fascinated by the glamour’s and world of entertainment. This action leads them to think that they would be able to earn good money in the field of films and sports which will guide them to follow the lifestyles of the film celebrities and athletes. Hence, teenagers will blindly trust the opinions of famous persons. On the contrary, elders prefer to live in real world, and they are already settled in their career. They always think for the consequences before applying any new ideas suggested by others in their lives.

To sum up, I strongly believe that, celebrities have more impact on the adolescents than the elders. However, I think young people should try to evaluate an opinion objectively instead of blindly following their stars' viewpoints.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Independent TOEFL Writing

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, thus, well, whereas, for instance, i think, such as, as a result, as well as, on the contrary, to begin with, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2760.0 1977.66487455 140% => OK
No of words: 530.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20754716981 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79809637944 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86728890672 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 271.0 212.727598566 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511320754717 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 855.0 618.680645161 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.9850107491 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.5714285714 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9285714286 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.92857142857 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272491938114 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0815521688697 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.120724211564 0.0737576698707 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219877746989 0.150856017488 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.293246601667 0.0645574589148 454% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 86.8835125448 142% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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