In general, crucial decisions are determined by the old generation, who takes control over an enterprise or political elections or legislation; nevertheless, the young generation plays an increasingly vital role in affecting these decisions. From my point of view, I believe that young people have critical influence on the current society.
For one thing, the young generation plays a crucial role in reversing some situation and constantly changing the public's attitude toward issues. Young people are more reluctant to take to the streets, fighting for their beliefs and causes, instead of sticking to the rules and being afraid of making changes. Compared to the old generation, young people generally hold passion and courage to reveal injustice and problems of the society. As a result, the public are touched and influenced by the spirits young people have and even switch their stances or attitudes. For instance, the Sunflower Student Movement in Taiwan in 2014 has already affected the society substantially, indicating the power of the young generation. Regardless the outcomes of the law and different political positions, the public were more aware of what Taiwanese government did at the time.
For another, many election strategies as well as recruitments of corporations indicate the young generation's effects toward the society. Perceiving the strategies of different districts thorough the country during election, parties and politicians put more and more emphasis on young people' opinions as the young generation are more willing to participate political activities than before. Furthermore, some advertisements of enterprises' recruiting show the fact that many enterprises eager to appeal creative young people as well. More and more advertisements publicize that they offer freedom for latest graduated students to exert their skills, and providing salaries over average waves. Hence, judging from the circumstances mentioned above, many parties and companies value the young generation.
Admittedly, most of the significant decisions are made by the elders as they hold in higher positions; however, young people are now influencing the society from many aspects. In conclusion, I believe that young people are increasingly influential to the future of society.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 114, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'publics'' or 'public's'?
Suggestion: publics'; public's
...e situation and constantly changing the publics attitude toward issues. Young people ar...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, hence, however, if, nevertheless, so, well, for instance, in conclusion, in general, as a result, as well as, for one thing
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 9.8082437276 0% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 43.0788530466 30% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1951.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 345.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.65507246377 4.8611393121 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99551719965 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.550724637681 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 609.3 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.3156887154 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.066666667 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.06666666667 5.45110844103 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151802250624 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0607118130361 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0432993301207 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11390270633 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0384283431785 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 11.7677419355 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.21 58.1214874552 54% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.84 10.9000537634 145% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.99 8.01818996416 125% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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