The world has changed significantly since the explosion of the Information Revolution. Most of the traditional values are on the edge of collapse including the way people buying product. Tied with the emerging convenience supported by the internet, the behavior of shopping has reached to a new level. I do believe that buying a commodity due to its core application is no longer a true purpose.
In the first place, customers consider a product not only by its true value but also by numerous aspects. In fact, the explosion of information has impacted on marketing. It is not simply a pure market as it was in which only customers and manufacturers could be able to balance the supply-demand relationship. In fact, the new era of the internet facilitated the commercial advertisements to spread to every corners of the known world. It becomes easy than ever before for the businesses to approach their potential targets. A series of social network like Facebook, Twitter, or Instagram play an important role as a bridge connecting two sides of supply and demand. Moreover, such kinds of social network did collect our behaviors, interests, or even worse our income level then sold this information to the manufactures. Indeed, we are nothing but the victims trapped inside a gigantic cell of shopping fever. Therefore, the products we decide to buy are actually the results of the information we leaked carelessly. Equally is the fact that the combination of manufactures and social network is a perfect trap to charm us into buying its own products, which have nothing to do with our needs.
On the other hand, we are influenced by others’ behavior. Basically, human formed by herd mentality, individuals imitate other group members of higher social status in their consumer behavior. Hence, we are Inevitably influenced by our idols or celebrities. It is a wise policy for the famous brands to choose the celebrities as their brand ambassadors. For example, Adidas has chosen Ronaldo as its representatives. Afterwards, a series of image relating to Adidas appear daily on his million-follower Instagram and then exaggerate the core value of this product. As a result, thousands of teenagers who consider Ronaldo their idol are contributing to Adidas’s daily revenue. Even if they simply need a $30-shoes to play soccer, they are willing to squander hundreds of dollars on a brand one. It is one of thousands prime examples to prove that we are actually buying what we are not in urgent need of.
In conclusion, buying commodity based on our demands is the story of previous century. The style of “living on the fast lane” in 21st century has trapped customer in an enormous cell of shopping which served manufactures’ revenues. I have no doubt to declare that we are spending money on the products which are not relative to our needs.
- Some people believe that the qualities a person needs to become successful in today’s world cannot be learned at a university or similar academic institution. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 84
- The range of technology available to people is increasing the gap between the rich and the poor. Others think it has an opposite effect. Discuss both views and give your opinions. 73
- The best way to reduce youth crime is to educate their parents with parental skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 84
- The money spent by governments on space programmes should be better spent on vital public services such as schools and hospitals. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 84
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?“Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past” 76
The world has changed
The world has changed significantly since the explosion of the Information Revolution. Most of the traditional values are on the edge of collapse including the way people buying product. Tied with the emerging convenience supported by the internet, the behavior of shopping has reached to a new level. I do believe that buying a commodity due to its core application is no longer a true purpose.
In the first place, customers consider a product not only by its true value but also by numerous aspects. In fact, the explosion of information has impacted on marketing. It is not simply a pure market as it was in which only customers and manufacturers could be able to balance the supply-demand relationship. In fact, the new era of the internet facilitated the commercial advertisements to spread to every corners of the known world. It becomes easy than ever before for the businesses to approach their potential targets. A series of social network like Facebook, Twitter, or Instagram play an important role as a bridge connecting two sides of supply and demand. Moreover, such kinds of social network did collect our behaviors, interests, or even worse our income level then sold this information to the manufactures. Indeed, we are nothing but the victims trapped inside a gigantic cell of shopping fever. Therefore, the products we decide to buy are actually the results of the information we leaked carelessly. Equally is the fact that the combination of manufactures and social network is a perfect trap to charm us into buying its own products, which have nothing to do with our needs.
On the other hand, we are influenced by others’ behavior. Basically, human formed by herd mentality, individuals imitate other group members of higher social status in their consumer behavior. Hence, we are Inevitably influenced by our idols or celebrities. It is a wise policy for the famous brands to choose the celebrities as their brand ambassadors. For example, Adidas has chosen Ronaldo as its representatives. Afterwards, a series of image relating to Adidas appear daily on his million-follower Instagram and then exaggerate the core value of this product. As a result, thousands of teenagers who consider Ronaldo their idol are contributing to Adidas’s daily revenue. Even if they simply need a $30-shoes to play soccer, they are willing to squander hundreds of dollars on a brand one. It is one of thousands prime examples to prove that we are actually buying what we are not in urgent need of.
In conclusion, buying commodity based on our demands is the story of previous century. The style of “Living on the fast lane” in 21st century has trapped customer in an enormous cell of shopping which served manufactures’ revenues. I have no doubt to declare that we are spending money on the products which are not relative to our needs.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1021, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Equally,
...f the information we leaked carelessly. Equally is the fact that the combination of man...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, hence, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, for example, in conclusion, in fact, no doubt, as a result, in the first place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2398.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 474.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05907172996 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66599839874 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0672696787 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537974683544 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 767.7 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.670707649 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.2307692308 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2307692308 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.42307692308 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116968932815 0.236089414692 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0307075717864 0.076458572812 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.042039041266 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0766127182843 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0391213849455 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 136.0 86.8835125448 157% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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