Do you agree or disagree?
One of the best ways that parents can help their children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
Even though many psychologists and some of the people argue as if it is a general truth that the significant method and role which parents can have in future life of their children is that prepare the best situations by more comfortable stuffs and also ban them to take a part-time job, I firmly recommend that adulthoods especially parents who are anxious about the future job skills and experiences of children, they have to help and admire children to have a part time job in lower ages. And believe it or not, parents have an important and helpful function in inspire and support the children. I will elaborate my idea with significant reasons in the following paragraphs.
One of the meaningful reasons coming to my mind at first is that if parents want to witness a successful generation, they should encourage and make ready children to take a short time job beside their study in school. Recent researchers conducted in the last two decades around this topic showed that people who with great experiences and full more acknowledges are famous person in society in comparisons with those who rarely do some work in childhood. For example when I was in 10 years old, I used to go the laboratory in my father’s work and help and learn fundamental work at there, now I am doing my theses in laboratory’s university. I not only have enormous awareness and wisdom, but also I have enjoyable memories from my childhood.
Another remarkable reason is that parents are the best sponsors and helpers in this golden opportunity of children, because in this situation they have better brain and focus on various subjects and also they can learn and achieve different skills that it is more efficient for them. As a matter of fact, children due to don’t have busy thought and responsibility, parent can help them and sure their time to children that spend a part of on job for gain a few money and also familiar with different people. For instance, my friend is a renowned entrepreneur that he has worked in a company as a worker, but now he is a manager in some companies.
As a result, for the reasons mentioned above and whole arrange of others, I strongly believe that it is far more expedient, the parent’s assistant and admiration can be useful and beneficial for both of children and their parents indeed, actually children are the future of families and devoting money and time on them is investing money in the future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: some
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Suggestion: much; little
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun money seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'little money'.
Suggestion: little money
... that spend a part of on job for gain a few money and also familiar with different people...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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... now he is a manager in some companies. As a result, for the reasons mentioned a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, so, for example, for instance, as a matter of fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 13.8261648746 210% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2025.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 423.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78723404255 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81640563156 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51536643026 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 647.1 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.94265232975 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 38.0 20.1344086022 189% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 117.093450001 48.9658058833 239% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 184.090909091 100.406767564 183% => OK
Words per sentence: 38.4545454545 20.6045352989 187% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.63636363636 5.45110844103 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.345132278051 0.236089414692 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118924856974 0.076458572812 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106346213453 0.0737576698707 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215299846316 0.150856017488 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0609005727541 0.0645574589148 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.4 11.7677419355 173% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.37 58.1214874552 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.9 10.1575268817 166% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 28.0 10.002688172 280% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 17.2 10.0537634409 171% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.247311828 166% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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