People nowadays have more flexibility to choose their career, which results in unwillingness to try other new things. From my perspective, people should relax themselves with activities that are different from their job rather than only doing things that are similar with their jobs.
If they try to relax themselves with things that are distinct from their work, people are able to try many other things and have access to the part of the world which they are unfamiliar with. It provides them with opportunities to complete their cognition of the world. Although a person can love his job deeply, she might feel tired and bored about it after repeating doing it for a long time. Relaxing herself with something different from her work allows her to move her attention from her work temporarily, which helps her to be released from her work and refresh her mind by focusing on something distinct. Also, people’s minds keep updating and learning instead of being stagnant if they tend to relax themselves with things different from their work.
On the contrary, doing her job to relax harms a person’s mental and physical health because it already occupies a long time to do a thing at work. If she continues to do the same thing after work for relax, it will become a threaten to a person’s health. Take one of my friends Edward as an example. Edward is a programmer. He sits all day long in front of a computer and staring at the screen. He loves programming so faithfully that he continues to sit in front of his computer and write computer program even when he is at home after work. He seldom hangs out with his friends and talks to them face-to-face. As a result, he was obese and became extremely vulnerable to illnesses due to the decreasing of his immunity.
In a word, participating in activities that are different from work for relax exposes people to a more colorful outside world. Besides, it allows people to live a meaningful and healthy life by relaxing themselves with different things and avoiding comfort zones.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 227, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ng after work for relax, it will become a threaten to a person's health. Take one of ...
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Line 3, column 553, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ram even when he is at home after work. He seldom hangs out with his friends and t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, if, so, as a result, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1700.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 352.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82954545455 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6993600022 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.508522727273 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 516.6 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.5539271451 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.0 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7058823529 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.45110844103 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.342404014801 0.236089414692 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104263146961 0.076458572812 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0880592846925 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214776052377 0.150856017488 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0287540441838 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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