There is no doubt that educating children is one of the most difficult tasks possible, because most of the kids, especially juveniles, are not docile nor easy to manage. The advent of modern technology has made our lives a lot more convenient, but what about the children education? There has been no shortage of debates among individuals on whether in contemporary society it's more challenging to teach kids than before. I vehemently cling to the notion that in this fast-paced modern era, it's a lot more arduous to educate children. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into two of my most prominent reasons for advocating this viewpoint.
First and foremost, with the emergence of modern technology and the ever-increasing pace of its improvements, the number of sources of distraction available to kids increased tremendously. Therefore, it's more difficult now to teach to children than before. To elucidate more, nowadays, adolescents have access to a plethora of video games and online games, which are designed to distract children for hours without even noticing. Kids now spend a considerable amount of time on social media and their cell phones, which leaves no free time to dedicate to their home works and assignments. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. My nephew was the best student in their class through middle school to high school, but as soon as his parents got him a cell phone, his performance decreased notably. He used to amuse himself with math problems before, but now math and physics problems look boring to him, compared to the entertaining video games. His teachers were also saying that he isn't concentrating in class either. This example clearly illustrates the negative impacts of complex technology on youth education.
Furthermore, another equally compelling reason for corroborating my stance lies in the fact that due to the overuse of video games and social media, it's more arduous to impress teenagers with math and science. Not much long before, kids would become fascinated with chemistry with a simple experiment in class, but now these things seem ordinary to them. My personal experience is a compelling illustration of this. I remember when I was in middle school, my teacher performed an exciting physics experiment in the class, and at was that moment I got obsessed with physics and decided to be a great physicist. But now when I look at children, none of these science experiments are interesting for them. They found them boring and tedious.
To put it all in a nutshell, having all the aforementioned reasons and examples into account, I strongly believe that it's more challenging to teach young people now, on the ground that it's a lot easier to get your hands on cell phones and online games, as well as it's harder to interest kids to science now.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'teaching'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'challenge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: teaching
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Suggestion: it's; it is
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Message: Did you mean 'teaching'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'challenge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: teaching
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, look, so, therefore, well, no doubt, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2408.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 481.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00623700624 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68313059816 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.844124995 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544698544699 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 750.6 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.9515677542 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.666666667 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9047619048 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.90476190476 5.45110844103 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175330966854 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0504542203349 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0509645003789 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0982598019225 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0471491538055 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 86.8835125448 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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