Essay topics: TPO-47 - Independent Writing TaskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.

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Essay topics: TPO-47 - Independent Writing Task
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.

I profoundly believe that it is important to be well-informed about world's events even they will not directly impact on my everyday life. The reasons on which my prospect is based will be discussed in details below.

Firstly, a problem which today is irrelevant to our life may become a trouble which requires to be taken care of in the future. Probably the best illustration of this idea is international terrorism. In fact, for several decades terrorism was a problem of third world countries and their inner wars. For instance, Taliban was created in Afghanistan after the Soviet Union invaded the country; for more than fifteen years this terroristic organization did not show up in any other part of the world. However, after the USSR gave up, Taliban claimed to be at war with the western countries. Taliban launched a series of attacks in Europe, Asia and the USA. In case, public paid more attention to the organization, its activity there would be a possibility to fight it and even completely annihilate when it was small and weak.

Secondly, we who live in reach and prosperous countries have a responsibility to help people who are in danger because of war or a natural disaster. We live in the world which is interconnected and information flows freely, we may and even must help people who suffer because some day we may be in similar situation. For example, New Zealand is a well-developed country which usually takes part at various rescue missions and which supplies goods for countries which faced a humanitarian disaster. A week ago a strong earthquake has ruined a vast part of New Zealand and now millions of people who are not influenced by the calamity donate money, clothes to help dwellers of the island who undergo difficulties.

Finally, there is a pragmatic reason to be aware of events around the world as well. Events which take place in remoted places of the planet may have indirect impact on bonds, assets and financial market as a whole. Therefore, any person who cares about one's prosperity must look for news in order to make a wise investment or avoid having loses.

To wrap up, we need to be aware of events which take place in the world because we live in the world which is interconnected and event which happened on the opposite side of the globe although may not have an explicit effect on our lives, will have an implicit one. So, we have to disavow from the harmful illusion that we somehow disconnected from the rest of the world. This is the solution to many of our current and future problems.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 222, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'decades'' or 'decade's'?
Suggestion: decades'; decade's
...ational terrorism. In fact, for several decades terrorism was a problem of third world ...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 255, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
.... Therefore, any person who cares about ones prosperity must look for news in order ...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, well, for example, for instance, in fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2112.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 443.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76749435666 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72184969747 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539503386005 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 678.6 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.1162184281 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.157894737 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3157894737 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.78947368421 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.104597058714 0.236089414692 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0356321645138 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.053265431951 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.076411789668 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0548129022048 0.0645574589148 85% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK

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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Sentence: Events which take place in remoted places of the planet may have indirect impact on bonds, assets and financial market as a whole.
Error: remoted Suggestion: No alternate word

Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 27 in 30
Category: Excellent Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 443 350
No. of Characters: 2058 1500
No. of Different Words: 239 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.588 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.646 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.665 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 136 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 103 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 63 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.316 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.894 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.632 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.294 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.53 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.106 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5

Hello, my reader.
I wonder how I can write good essays and terrible at the same time. I really do the same. Please help me understand the roots of my problem.
I do understand that this is a vague question but I really cannot grasp the problem and thus i cannot unroot it. Hope on your help, I believe that all my recent bad essays ought to have similar characteristics.
Thank you.
p.s. Hope on your help and expertise.

Because you made the reasons complicated. Need to take TOEFL essays easy. As we told, TOEFL exam is for high school students going for colleges, the reasons should be pretty simple.

and try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.