extended family
The family has an influential and tremendous impact on our lives because it can enhance our success and improve our future as it encompasses our core and effects our behavior in a valuable manner. In fact, it is vitally important to be involved with them and share our days with them, especially our grandparents because they have more free time than our parents. Therefore, I believe that the role of the whole family's members are imperative due to its benefits in both of the acquiring attributes and broadening the horizon. The following explanations go as follow.
To begin with, the social skills are essential and people must eagerly seek to teach their children about them because such skills will be deemed as a guiding light for them to fulfill their goals. Indeed, they can gain them by interacting and communicating effectively with their relatives such as their grandparents, uncles, and aunts because these persons are considered as bias guidances that they will render the best word of advice to their nephews in order to help them to achieve a success. For instance, when I was a kid, my uncle was the role model for me because my parents had long labor days, even in their leisure time they used to work overtime to provide me and my sisters with amenities of life, So, he provided me with beneficial information that assisted me and had a great influence on my personality, He taught me how to cooperate efficiently and collaborate effectively, thus, such a collaborative environment enhanced my communication skills immensely which had a positive impact on my future workflow and productivity. Consequently, relatives' role and especially the extended ones are crucial because they aid in instilling the concrete basis of children interpersonal skills.
Second, education is the cornerstone of the communities, thus, the children must be educated from an early age because they are the pillars and the power that will guide these communities toward progress. In fact, they could not study without a guide in their lives and the effective leader to lead them in this way are the grandparents because their age gives them the opportunity to engage in their grandchildren's lives more than their fathers and mothers who are busy in their tasks in order to secure their children future. For example, my grandfather had a great experience in teaching science and this experience was the outcome of his long life and knowledge, Therefore, he endowed me with a myriad amount of information that aided me to widen my perspective and enhance my interdisciplinary development which, in turn, that had a great influence on my intellectual ability and provided me with a high quality and diversity of job opportunities. In conclusion, the grandparents have an indelible role in our kids' lives that they help them to build up the education's base.
To sum up, the effect of the extended family is not deniable because they have the aptitude to establish the strong base of both the learning abilities and the social skills.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, if, second, so, still, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, such as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 78.0 43.0788530466 181% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2530.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 505.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0099009901 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74048574033 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94130804413 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.49504950495 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 811.8 618.680645161 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 38.0 20.1344086022 189% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 129.137099753 48.9658058833 264% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 194.615384615 100.406767564 194% => OK
Words per sentence: 38.8461538462 20.6045352989 189% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0 5.45110844103 202% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0719442495112 0.236089414692 30% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0400212854611 0.076458572812 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0709263762575 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0848361783673 0.150856017488 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0955128849795 0.0645574589148 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.6 11.7677419355 184% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.91 58.1214874552 57% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.10430107527 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.1 10.1575268817 178% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.37 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.46 8.01818996416 118% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 86.8835125448 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.2 10.0537634409 171% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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