The extended family is less important now than it was in the past.
extended families had beeen the norm in the distant past for families, where families consisted of grand parents, aunts, uncles, cousins and other close relatives having close bonds. this is in fact the case even now in most of the asian countries. but at present, the norms of family structure and bonds are changing from extended family to nuclear family, where close bonds only exist between children and parents. I strongly believe that this trend is not desireble for the society as a whole in the long run. it is with this strong belief I disagree with the statement that the extended family is less important now than it was in the past. In contrast, I suggest that the need for an extended family exists now more than ever. I will explain my stand in the following essay.
Advent of the social media has paved the way to the creation of a plethora of artificial relationships and bonds. people use relationships as an exhibit item to be show cased for the society rather than as a spiritual support and connection. thus, there is a need to revitalize the true meaning of a relationship. extended families will just do that. extended families provide relationships like grandchildren-grandparent, cousin-cousin, uncle-nephew, etc. that constitute a more genuine form of relationship. Such relationships are more likely to result in moral support for each other, where as artificial relationships like those in social media result in envy, jelousy, hypocracy etc. thus extended families are needed to create good relationships among people in the society.
Moreover, people are increasingly livng a busy and hectic life. parents nowadays barely have time to look after their children, as in most cases both parents engage in full time jobs. In this context, parents need support in raising their children. On the other hand, children need more warmth which they do not recieve from their parents. extended families can solve this issue. grand parents can offer help in looking after the childrens while parents are away. they would be a more reliable shelter for the parents to leave children, since they themselves have raised children and they have genuine love towards the young ones, as opposed to some child day care centre where the main motive is profit making, rather than child well being. In this manner extended families would reduce tension in families.
people are leaving from the extended culture because of the busy hectic lives, but do not realize that the relief and soothing for their hectic lives lie in extended families in the first place.thus, one could see the necessity and the importnace of extended families, now more than ever.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, moreover, so, thus, well, while, in contrast, in fact, in most cases, in the first place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2244.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 442.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07692307692 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75339738322 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509049773756 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 688.5 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.7581849574 48.9658058833 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.5 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4166666667 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.375 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.5376344086 289% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.319330783883 0.236089414692 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0903621039448 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125866127321 0.0737576698707 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199917522422 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.137641494851 0.0645574589148 213% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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