Being surrounded by lovely persons like grandparents, cousins, aunts and uncles is the best the most precious treasure that people can have in their lives . However, during the last few decades, it has been unprecedent change of people perception about the family due to the contemporary modern life trend . Some people may agree that the extended family has become less significant with time, while others may have different point of view. Actually, I believe that extended family is less important now than it was in the past due to many reasons that I will elaborate on them in the following paragraphs.
First, the modern technology has affected the whole family relationships negatively. Even though, the great assistance of the Internet and social media, has facilized the communication among the extended family ( family members) as they can communicate with each other online, they are less likely to chat face-to-face, which does have an adverse effect on people's feelings and love. Consequently, family members do not pay visit to each other, and do not have those unforgettable moments of amusement that the extended family bring to all of the family members. Moreover, holidays used to be the time when the family get together and celebrate parties with close relatives. In contrast, special occasion parties nowadays are held individually by every different branch of the household. Sending text messages or postcards are the only gesture that remember people of their extended family.
Second, in today`s life family members are extremely occupied and have no time to keep in touch with their own parents or anyone else. They have to work five days for living, and sometimes more, and have only six or seven hours a day for rest, which makes it really difficult for them to maintain their relationships to the extended family. As a result the close relatives have no significance in the small family daily life. Even children, nowadays, cannot memorize the names of their aunts or cousins or uncles, because they don`t have close relationship with them.
To sum up, taking in consideration the points mentioned above, I definitely agree with the statement that The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
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- The extended family(grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past. 86
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, consequently, first, however, if, may, moreover, really, second, so, while, in contrast, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1929.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18548387097 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74692640572 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561827956989 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 615.6 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.2660114621 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.6 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.06666666667 5.45110844103 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.339805087762 0.236089414692 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114078508707 0.076458572812 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.156754563828 0.0737576698707 213% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.277973562339 0.150856017488 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.211032832372 0.0645574589148 327% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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