These days, many people are living longer than before. There are many reasons for this. For example, technological improvements, changes to education systems, improvements to our diets. Among them, I think the development of technology has impacted this phenomenon. I have three reasons for this.
First, advances in medical technology have lengthened people’s lives. In the past, people just died from a cold. On the other hand, cancer, which is a disease, also has a lower mortality rate now, and even if you get the coronavirus, it will be cured in a little while. This is because medical technology has developed. Also, in the past, because science and technology were not developed, transportation facilities were not well equipped, so many people died due to delay in time even in an emergency.
Second, on the contrary, the education system has changed and more people commit suicide. In Korea, students can go to a good university only if they maintain good grades throughout their three years of high school, or they should do well on the CSAT and go to college. Therefore, many students are under more pressure than in the past. So, the change in the education system rather adversely affected longevity.
Last, improvements in diet have also not had such a significant impact. Of course, people eat a lot now than before, but that is the problem. These days, people eat so much that they have to overcome various diseases or obesity. Also, a variety of junk foods are produced, which is rather damaging to people’s health. In fact, in the past, people were not abundant, so they were eaten in moderation, but these days, it is often seen around people who eat even if they are full.
This is why I think technological improvements make people live longer. Other reasons are that people’s lives have been extended because they have gone through people’s health and medical technology has grown rapidly, enabling them to treat even new diseases.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 153, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...re, but that is the problem. These days, people eat so much that they have to ove...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, then, therefore, well, while, for example, i think, in fact, of course, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1641.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 328.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00304878049 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71443355766 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.545731707317 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 518.4 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.9599771761 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.1428571429 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.619047619 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224560403033 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0768449864391 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0522475434723 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132953113244 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0631862007902 0.0645574589148 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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