If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.
I am from Assam, North eastern state of India, I would like to change the mindset of all the people to make them realise the seriousness of preserving the precious nature that we have. My hometown had a perfect balance between people and wildlife a long time ago but due to encroaching, poaching, and careless deforestation has led to its imbalance, which I believe can be recreated if all of us work together towards preserving it.
My hometown has been an inspiration for the whole of India. It is known for its natural beauty and the simple lifestyle of most of the people who live their life in harmony with nature. It has Kaziranga National Park, particularly known for the famous one horn Rhino. Apart from that, it has many natural parks and wildlife sanctuaries namely Manash Tiger reserve, Gibbon wildlife sanctuary etc. The matter of concern that i would the people to imbibe within them is that due to repeated instance of poaching the Rhino population has reduced to a dwindling scale as a result not only one species but all the other species, like elephants, wild hogs, deer, snakes etc. are suffering as a consequence. This cannot be stopped if people are not aware strongly about the consequences and ready to take action for the same. The same situation is even aggrandized due to encroaching by the people themselves, as the human population in increasing.
Hence, increasing population is a huge concern, due to the outburst of population and lack of land resources as well as income sources, people are encroaching over these natural reserves, destructing nature. There are also reports of smuggling woods and timber from the forest reserves. By doing so people do not realise that what they are doing is because of imbalance set off by none other than themselves, as a result animals are compelled to come out to the people’s areas in search of food and shelter. I want the people to understand this particular imbalance.
Because of this natural beauty, it is a tourist destination which is helping the state’s as well as the country’s economy. The national parks, bio diversity of flora and fauna, untouched mountains, the largest river island etc. is the richness of my hometown. And I believe that it can be preserved and shifted back to its previous state if people’s mindset can be altered to focus towards these matters.
What we are today is because of the nature, it has provided us the liberty to use the fruits of nature without any stymie. I believe why we are known all over the world is this natural beauty, huge old trees shading our grounds, pure air, wildlife and people living in harmony and the natural synchronization between the people and the wildlife. It was one of the perfect example of the equilibrium needed to preserve every living thing on earth. Therefore I strongly believe, if I could change the people's mind set towards these prevailing matters we can put a stop towards these things and can set an example in front of the world that every living thing can live peacefully and harmoniously.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'hence', 'if', 'so', 'therefore', 'well', 'apart from', 'as a result', 'as well as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.252115059222 0.229887763892 110% => OK
Verbs: 0.164128595601 0.158761421928 103% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0693739424704 0.0866891130778 80% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0355329949239 0.046263068375 77% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0575296108291 0.0685040099705 84% => OK
Prepositions: 0.115059221658 0.118717715034 97% => OK
Participles: 0.0592216582064 0.0351676179071 168% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.75263073508 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0287648054146 0.0309702414327 93% => OK
Particles: 0.00338409475465 0.00188951952338 179% => OK
Determiners: 0.104906937394 0.0887237588012 118% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0169204737733 0.0209618222197 81% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0118443316413 0.0139019557991 85% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3081.0 2387.08602151 129% => OK
No of words: 525.0 408.028673835 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.86857142857 5.86048508987 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78673985869 4.48200974243 107% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.358095238095 0.338922669872 106% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.266666666667 0.251872472559 106% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.167619047619 0.174417080927 96% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.110476190476 0.112833075102 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75263073508 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504761904762 0.524397521467 96% => OK
Word variations: 60.4594838046 59.2087087015 102% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6684587814 106% => OK
Sentence length: 23.8636363636 20.5533526081 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.8535913342 48.84282405 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.045454545 120.699889404 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8636363636 20.5533526081 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.454545454545 0.644075263715 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.54480286738 90% => OK
Readability: 50.5303030303 45.7405998639 110% => OK
Elegance: 1.65789473684 1.45489161554 114% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.103930710899 0.300154397459 35% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.105167191644 0.103427244359 102% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0654492014702 0.0752933317313 87% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.514298858478 0.497263757937 103% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.15246802063 0.151897553556 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0442991718605 0.114077575197 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0285594153801 0.0781384742642 37% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.429783719085 0.336927656856 128% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0431169278385 0.067059652881 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0794127887111 0.210909579961 38% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0206343604603 0.0618886996521 33% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8870967742 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 14.0 8.42114695341 166% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 13.6433691756 125% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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