Technology has brought about sweeping changes as to how people live, work, behave etc. Such an aspect of human life that has been affected by technology is the creativity, especially in children. People who are not familiar with the fast developing technology, mostly comprising adult generation, has the notion that the changes that the technology has brought to the quality and nature of creativity in children accounts for degredation. I strongly oppose this idea, that children are less creative now, but rather would argue that the children are more creative than their past generations, but this creativity having a new look. This idea would be elaborated in the following essay.
Firstly, Children have more tools than earlier to make creations, thanks to technolgy. For example, advancement in technology has made way to sophisticated and high performing computers and software. Modern generation of children are keen to make their own creations in the form of software, graphic designs etc. The barrier to entry for such impactful and sophisticated creations have been significanlty reduced. For example, the creativity that I have built up at my age in making software, is aquired by a child ten years younger than me far more easily. In this way, it can be argued that modern day children are more creative, thanks to technology.
Secondly, children today have access to a vast amount of information. This kind of exposure deliver two key features that help harness creativity. One is restricting duplication. Two is a large pool of ideas that can be mixed and mingled to result in a new, creative idea. For example, in the past, duplicate inventions were abandant, and the rate of creation of new products was small. But now students, let alone peole at large, are creating new products at a very fast pase. Students use different technological platforms like github and stackoverflow to avoid duplication and go on to build new things efficiently.
Thus, it is clear that technology has made children, the new generation, more creative. It is just that the face of new creativity is different. When you look at the creations children are making at present despite their nature, it speaks volumes of the creativity in them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, look, second, secondly, so, thus, as to, for example, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1880.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 367.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12261580381 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8933737468 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558583106267 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 583.2 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.7543475252 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.5238095238 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4761904762 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.09523809524 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219336874256 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0610849527869 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.052056775875 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137475162713 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0572930754892 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.12 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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