It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.
Some people think that it is better for the children to work different jobs form their parents. People think that when children work other jobs different from their parents, the children will be able to get more experience. Although I understand their point of view, I have a different opinion. I believe that working the same job as parent’s job will provides the children with more experiences. the basis of my view is educational, social and personal.
Form the educational perspective, patents consider to be the best role model to their children. Parents pass on positive value to their children. When children decided to continue their higher education and get a bachelors degree, parents are the first who help to take the decision with their children. Parents could guide their children to choose which college is better for them. Parents already passed with these experiences before and they knew what is right and what is wrong. It is a good chance for the children to get easy information from their parents. Beside, many parents would help their children in their studying. For instance, if on of the parent are graduated from pharmacy school and his son apply for pharmacy school. He can help his son to understand the subject. When the children will have the same career as their parents, allows that children to be more successful.
Financially, parents could help their children to have their successful own business. When the children decided to run their own business, the first reference they ask are the parents. Parents have experiences how to manage a business. Children see that parents are the best references. For instance, as I mentioned above the pharmacist parent can help his child in his education, also the pharmacist parent would help his child to run his own business. The pharmacist parent had his own pharmacy for more than 15 years. He knew how to manage a business. He could help his son to buy the place. He helps his son to renovate the place to be a pharmacy. He leads his son to the best directions, such as from where to buy the medication, and how to deal with pharmaceutical companies. all this information the children will got from the parent will help them to have better business. children will save time and money, going in risk of trying by themselves. Parents have gold experiences which easy pass to their children to be more successful.
In conclusion, for the reason i mention before I encourage all the children to proceed the same career as their parents. That will help the children to be more successful in their education. Having the same career as their parents will also keep the children with a better job consequently more money
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, if, so, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2262.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 460.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91739130435 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6311565067 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65007400831 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.384782608696 0.524837075471 73% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 665.1 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.994623655914 302% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.3469099088 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.9677419355 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.8387096774 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.29032258065 5.45110844103 42% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.386240510836 0.236089414692 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119871118464 0.076458572812 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0973931921403 0.0737576698707 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.276887790604 0.150856017488 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0886769523918 0.0645574589148 137% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.66 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.7 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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