It is commonly believed that, in life, success is not the most important thing. It is more important to remain happy and optimistic when we fail. Do you agree with this idea?
People have different methods in their life in order to confront their problems and harsh times. Although some people believe that being successful in their lives is very important and they just care about this issue, personally, I am on the side of people who strongly believe that being happy even in our frailer time is too far important in our life. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, having a positive vision to loses will give us a lot of motivation/make us a strong person. To be more specific, there are a lot of harsh times in our life and depended on our abilities it might be possible that we cannot achieve them and have a lot of fails in our life. Therefore, it is too important to be positive and try again to enhance our abilities to gain our goals. My own experience is a compelling example of what I mean. Ten years ago, after high school, I wanted to continue my education and a high-rank university. I was not that much genius student to enter top rank universities without any problems. Therefore, I could not able to meet the requirements for getting admission in the year after graduation from high school. Because I really was interested in that university I did stay at home and studied hard to meet all the requirements. Although I could able to be unhappy and disappointed about my frailer, I wanted to make myself strong enough and improve my information to gain my goal.
Moreover, if we look at losses in our life from a positive point of view, it will improve our self-confidence. To put it in other words, people who are a hard worker and never accept to do not achieve some problems in their lives and cannot dismiss them will learn how to solve problems in their lives, in fact, their learn how to approach to a different issue, and as a result, their self-confidence will improve. For instance, as I mentioned in the example in the past paragraph, although it took me a whole of one year to accept the university that I wanted, it taught me that I am able to achieve whatever that I want in my life. I learned that I should just keep going and be patient, and then I can gain whatever that I want. Triumphs come after losses, we should just believe in ourselves and do our best.
In conclusion, according to all the reasons and examples, I believe that this is too important to be positive in our life. This is because, not only does it make us strong, but improve our self-confidence.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
...trong, but improve our self-confidence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, moreover, really, so, then, therefore, for instance, i feel, i mean, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 80.0 43.0788530466 186% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2035.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 454.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.48237885463 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7143508823 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.469162995595 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 648.9 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.3422747248 48.9658058833 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.105263158 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8947368421 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.89473684211 5.45110844103 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143267037156 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0435427060114 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0562823176862 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107178795635 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0455847897155 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.0 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.18 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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