is it important for older people to learn new things just like young people do
Some people agree that older people should study or learn new things as it is for younger people. Others, however, do not support this view. Based on my personal life experiences, I definitely agree that it is important for older people to learn new things just like young people do.
First of all, older people need companions to talk to and learning how to use technology helps them meet new friends. For example, in mycountries, many elders find a lot of new friends who have the same interest through theinternet. In other words, learning how to use internet brings them more new friends to share with. On the other hand, if they do not know how to use internet, they would not have partners to talk. Thus, it is vital for older people to learn how to use technology.
Secondly, older focus on money so learning how to take of self helps older people save money. For instance, older people have some health problems in general and it is money-consuming for them to go to hospitals every time. To be more accurate, going to see doctors requires a lot of money. Moreover, they can learn some practical healthy knowledges in community school to deal with minor body problems, thus reducing the chance to spend money on medical care. As a result, learning healthy knowledges helps older save money.
Last but not least, older people care about their families therefore studying helps them being closer to their families. In short, because the world is changing so fast, it is hard for older people to communicate with other family members. That is to say, they can learn how to use technology such as computer or smart phones to talk to theirgrandchildren via studying. Accordingly, studying makes families more closer. In conclusion, becasue older people take emphasis on accompany, money, and their families, I strongly agree that older people ought tolearn new things as it is for young people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 90, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[9]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to be' or 'be'.
Suggestion: to be; be
... families therefore studying helps them being closer to their families. In short, bec...
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Line 4, column 408, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'closer' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: closer
...g. Accordingly, studying makes families more closer. In conclusion, becasue older people ta...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in general, in short, such as, as a result, first of all, in other words, on the other hand, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1575.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 326.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83128834356 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58213891552 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.521472392638 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 477.0 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.1181380573 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.5 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1111111111 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.1111111111 5.45110844103 241% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.517708695528 0.236089414692 219% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.173543735726 0.076458572812 227% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.179751921627 0.0737576698707 244% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.358373801627 0.150856017488 238% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.202876216523 0.0645574589148 314% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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