Nowadays, children rely too much on the technology, like computers, smart phone, video games, for fun and entertainment. Playing simpler toys or playing outside with friends would be better for the children's development.

I utterly agree witht the concept that, children nowadays rely more on technology and other related entertainments which has hazardous effects on their oldersleves. The parents and the teachers in schools should encourage students to spend more time with their friends. I believe this scheme will be advantageous for children in so many ways like reduction of the chances of being psychologicaly ill in future. The other two reasons that I can talk about are about children getting to understand and learn the right behavior and increasing senses of competition over beneficial activities like educational purposes.
First, I think that encouraging children to spend more time with their friends and have more interactions with them will have indespensable effects on their future personallity and mental health. The recent surveys has shown that more than sixty percent of the teenagers and adolescents around the world are struggling with the depression and consider themselves alone. It is well proved that virtually all the psychological problems that we run into in our adulthood are rooted in our early ages. If the children experience finding friends and socializing in early ages and in school will grow to have a stronger and healthier personality in future.
Furthermore, learning how to act in poblic and in real word is one of the important skills that the people should be taough to since the time they are in school. The more we grow up the more our behaviors and atitudes toward issues and peopole get consolidated and harder to change. Finding friends and being in variety of the friendship groups and teams like sport teams or music clubs from younger ages will accommodate children with more skills. This way they will keep develope themseleves to be better and how to be responsible, respectfull and independent in decision making. This way the children would be more ready for future and the real world after the graduation from school.
At last, the children get to be more influence and imitate more from their friends than their parents or their teachers. The friends have strong impacts in childrens' lives and behaviors. They like to compete more with their friends and prove their inteligence or abilities doing things like problem solving. If the children see their friends are studying and keep getting good grades they will be encouraged to spend more energy and time on their educational assignments and projects. This will bring them a huge success and prosperity in future.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that the time that children are spending on video game, surfing the web and computers should be controled and encouraged to be decreased by the parents and teachers. Socializing and finding friends will be beneficail for children in improving their relationships therefore less chances of getting psychological problems in future. The development of the lucrative personality and more encouragements for having healthier entertainments and activities are other impacts of finding friends.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, so, therefore, well, i think, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 36.0 13.8261648746 260% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2547.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 486.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24074074074 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69525374022 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86405044913 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.469135802469 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 763.2 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.611501817 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.285714286 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1428571429 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.19047619048 5.45110844103 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192956575232 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0702874280478 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0475695171898 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130390915699 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0275201306358 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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