Sports have a significant effect on our health. Playing sports is a great way to ensure more prosperous life as it is beneficial to our health, wealth and community. Some people believe that if they have a short period of time to do thing, they will choose to learn new hand made skills. Others disagree. Personally, I believe that if I have a plenty of time to do special stuff, I will learn new sport. I feel this for two important reasons, which I will explain in the subsequent paragraphs.
First, the most prominent point to be mentioned is that playing sports can enable you to be more healthy. It can reduce chronic illness, because playing sports makes you digest easily, relieve stress, and keeps you fit. Nowadays, due to the technological development, people become lazy to run, walk , and playing sports, which affects the public's health. The human development has led to a massive accumulation of trash which spoils the natural beauty of the plant. Consequently. the techniques that people used a decade ago are quickly becoming obsolete. My own experience is a compelling illustration of this. When I was in university, I was obese. My friend encouraged me to play sports with him, therefore we joined the basketball team. First, I was embarrassed, because my body was not in perfect shape. Consequently, I played basketball for two months, and I lost fifteen pounds. I was surprised. If I did not play sports, I would not be thriving like I am today. This experience taught me that playing sports helps the one to be fit and be more healthy.
The second rationale behind my idea is rooted in the fact that playing sports allow the public to have easier access to make friends. If you join any sports team, you will interact with various people with different attitudes, considerations, and perspectives. If you are exposed to people with different backgrounds, you can make unpredictable breakthroughs, which can boost your comprehension, and convenient understanding of complex matters. Therefore, I have to admit that my opinion on this matter is greatly influenced by my sister's example. When my sister was at high school, she was introverted, consequently, she joined a tennis class, which helped her to eliminate any feeling of discomfort. As soon as she joined the tennis team, she started to make friends, that helped her to excel in her future career and be successful in her field. As you can see, playing sports is very advantageous.
In conclusion, I prefer to play sports with group of people. This is because playing sports can keep you fit and more healthy, and because you can make new friends, which increases your social abilities. Everyone should realizes the effectiveness of playing sports.
- TPO 10 Integrated Writing Task 70
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...eople believe that if they have a short period of time to do thing, they will choose to learn ...
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Line 3, column 300, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...lopment, people become lazy to run, walk , and playing sports, which affects the p...
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Line 3, column 341, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'publics'' or 'public's'?
Suggestion: publics'; public's
..., and playing sports, which affects the publics health. The human development has led t...
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Line 3, column 468, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Consequently,
...spoils the natural beauty of the plant. Consequently. the techniques that people used a deca...
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Line 3, column 482, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...ural beauty of the plant. Consequently. the techniques that people used a decade ag...
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Line 7, column 221, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: 'realize'
Suggestion: realize
... your social abilities. Everyone should realizes the effectiveness of playing sports.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, if, second, so, therefore, i feel, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2274.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 460.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94347826087 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6311565067 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91268046521 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517391304348 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 670.5 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 22.0 9.59856630824 229% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.617235378 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.2142857143 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4285714286 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.46428571429 5.45110844103 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 11.8709677419 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.308190999223 0.236089414692 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.077689132977 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0804634468057 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193745874408 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0321441323355 0.0645574589148 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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