Celebrities nowadays are more often seen due to the advanced technology like Internet or social media, and some of the words they say might be magnified or even go viral online. As a millennial myself, I am definitely of the opinion that celebrities or someone famous have quite critical impacts on young people nowadays. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, social media apps is shaping the lives of people today, especially young people who are inseparable with their smartphones. The photo sharing based application Instagram can be an obvious example. Celebrities and someone who is famous is absolutely of no doubt having a lot of followers, thus they are capable of spreading their opinions elsewhere. In a couple years ago, an actor posted a video of him being poured by a bucket of iced water, it turned out to be a challenge of fund raising activity aimed to help people who have had suffered cancer. Instagram enables people to tag their friends below other people's post so it is way more easier for those posts to go viral on instagram through sharing among friends. People who are influential on instagram thus have a huge impact on their massive amount of followers.
Secondly, the image or public perception of celebrities mostly are positive toward their fans, and according to a psychological theory, their fans will strive to be closer to them either mentally or physically, in this way, they move closer to a better person by acquiring these characteristics owned by the ideal projection of celebrities have on them. This phenomena can be seen when someone famous said something improper yet most of his or hers fans still show a determined and supportive attitude toward them, because they are not willing to see the perfect projections they have built on those celebrities to be ruined deep in their hearts.
To sum up, the popularity of social media apps on smartphone and some mental characteristics of people are the main causes that people nowadays are more likely to be influenced by the opinions of people who are famous.
- Some people think that human needs for farmland housing and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals Do you agree or disagree with this point of view 73
- There s no doubt that Turtle Excluder Devices are a great idea that must be used by every single shrimping boat However they are far from perfect and in need of drastic improvement regardless of what the author in the reading may believe 71
- The sea otter is a small mammal that lives in waters along the western coast of North America from California to Alaska When some sea otter populations off the Alaskan coast started rapidly declining a few years ago it caused much concern because sea ot 73
- It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours 87
- Playing computer games is a waste of time Children should not be allowed to play them 88
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 108, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...logy like Internet or social media, and some of the words they say might be magnified or ev...
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Line 3, column 651, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
...s below other peoples post so it is way more easier for those posts to go viral on instagra...
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Line 5, column 355, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: These
...projection of celebrities have on them. This phenomena can be seen when someone famo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, second, secondly, so, still, thus, i feel, no doubt, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1763.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 358.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92458100559 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76566360311 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567039106145 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 567.0 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 79.4076595102 48.9658058833 162% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.916666667 100.406767564 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.8333333333 20.6045352989 145% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253151312472 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101547153369 0.076458572812 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0741259019401 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179265412686 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0641690339464 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 11.7677419355 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.85 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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