• In order to attract more tourists, the government could either improve safety by hiring more police or improve its appearance by repairing old buildings and streets. Which way do you think is more effective?
A glance at people’s attitude toward tourism, brings to the light a question that has been asked several times, namely, whether safety is more important or the city appearance. Although some people believe that cities’ appearance and looking is what they want to travel a country, I completely think opposite. As a person who has visited five countries recently, my opinion is that safety must be the priority because of several reasons.
The foremost reason why I am supporting this idea lies in the fact that security is one of the first and basic needs that humankinds want. If a person feels that the rate of rape, theft and burglary is high, he will not consider that country for travel. There is some evidence that proves my idea. During the Iraq’s war the tourist population decreases to one third even if it was easier to get visa. After finishing the war, tourist population gradually increased even though the appearance of the Iraq’s cities still was bad. Therefore, safety is the essential part of tourism market.
Another reason that I should deem is the fact that without safety, troublemakers destroy the historical places despite of government attempts. For example, even if the government build a new shopping mall, they break the glasses and ruin the public area. Without enough police nobody can control this situation and it is waste of money. This happened in Egypt when people were not satisfied of political activities of government and destroyed some part of the countries to show their dissatisfaction. The amount of tourists dropped significantly during strikes and the city appearance got very damaged. Hence, hiring more police can protect historical places.
Admittedly, people would like to see beautiful attractions such as museums, palaces and aquariums. A safe town without any fabulous location is not attractive for people to visit. Nevertheless, when we compare two cities one safe and not beautiful, and the other beautiful and not safe, people are more willing to visit the first one.
Due to the aforementioned argument explored in the previous statements, I strongly recommend the government to spend budget on safety and hire more police rather than repairing old buildings and streets to improve its appearance.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, look, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, third, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1917.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 368.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20923913043 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8069955061 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.603260869565 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 601.2 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.6923617883 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.894736842 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3684210526 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.57894736842 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193112399862 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0511873142406 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0734160160443 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119168925877 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100729995372 0.0645574589148 156% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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