Some people think that the children must live in a convince situation without any thinking about financial problems while others argue that children should learn how to save money at a young age. In my estimation, I believe that in order to having financial responsibility, children should attempt to learn to mange their money at teenager age in which some reasons are scrutinized as following.
first and foremost/ in the first place, the childhood as a golden period for learning is regarded as a key element. The childhood is the best time for sketching the long time planning. In this stage, a child can learn some concept about money saving. For instance, every child can have a plan for his pocket money to how spend or save his money. Beside, according to the psychologist, when children habitually do one thing, they continue to do until adulthood. Take brushing teeth as an example. Some adults have learned to brush their teeth since they was a children. Indeed, therefore, thus, in fact, learning financial rules in childhood can remind for every one all over the life.
Moreover, knowing the importance of saving money for rainy days is mentioned as a another reason. Some parents give award to children for saving money and teach them how to purchase their demand. Some adults without any controlling spend all their money and after a while they should barrow and all time they are in a rainy day. They never practiced or never learned how to use their money in childhood. I owe my parents whom they learned me for buying every things at first think deeply more times in childhood. Today, it is my habit that thinking must do before buying. In sum, by cultivating some skills in children, it may be avoided from falling in to the financial drawbacks.
Finally, entrancing in to the real financial medium and accepting some financial responsibility requires a profound schedule. Based on sociologist, the adults that acquired some business rules or skills in childhood, they are more successful that that others one. By knowing the procedure of managing the money at young age, every one can enter to a business and can provide the life’s infrastructure more quickly. Consequently, this person can achieve success much than others.
All in all, in the final analysis , I content that the children should learn some money management experts at young period. They should use from golden age and learn some skills for entrancing to the real life and know how to solve problem in rainy day.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Discourse Markers used:
['consequently', 'finally', 'first', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'while', 'for instance', 'in fact', 'in the first place']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.229473684211 0.229887763892 100% => OK
Verbs: 0.162105263158 0.158761421928 102% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0568421052632 0.0866891130778 66% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0315789473684 0.046263068375 68% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0526315789474 0.0685040099705 77% => OK
Prepositions: 0.130526315789 0.118717715034 110% => OK
Participles: 0.0547368421053 0.0351676179071 156% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.6171603528 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0336842105263 0.0309702414327 109% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.117894736842 0.0887237588012 133% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0294736842105 0.0209618222197 141% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0189473684211 0.0139019557991 136% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2525.0 2387.08602151 106% => OK
No of words: 426.0 408.028673835 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.92723004695 5.86048508987 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.48200974243 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.326291079812 0.338922669872 96% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.246478873239 0.251872472559 98% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.176056338028 0.174417080927 101% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.110328638498 0.112833075102 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6171603528 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.483568075117 0.524397521467 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 53.4215974859 59.2087087015 90% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6684587814 111% => OK
Sentence length: 18.5217391304 20.5533526081 90% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.2761732582 48.84282405 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.782608696 120.699889404 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5217391304 20.5533526081 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.565217391304 0.644075263715 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.54480286738 180% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 43.1696264544 45.7405998639 94% => OK
Elegance: 1.68376068376 1.45489161554 116% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.341086999911 0.300154397459 114% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.102947695095 0.103427244359 100% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0722524147169 0.0752933317313 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.455963270574 0.497263757937 92% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.169503336545 0.151897553556 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120883925926 0.114077575197 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103384256561 0.0781384742642 132% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.328130644363 0.336927656856 97% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0673211187908 0.067059652881 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.255702552346 0.210909579961 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105784612886 0.0618886996521 171% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8870967742 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.91756272401 244% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 6.0 8.42114695341 71% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 10.0 2.75985663082 362% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.6433691756 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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