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It is known that people are living longer nowadays. A number of reasons could be enumerated for the greater longevity of contemporary humans. Among all, two of these reasons are of vital importance. These two reasons will be explored below.
To begin with, we have access to a much more sophisticated medical system these days, which precludes many deaths due to maladies. In the past there was no organized health care system and epidemics were quite rampant. Consider for example the mortality rate caused by diseases like plague, small pox, tuberculosis, and even flues. Nevertheless, nowadays, thanks to the advances in both medical practice and pharmaceutics, we are much more immune against the aforementioned maladies. To the extent that one could simply contend that some of these illnesses have been rendered as eradicated. Take for example how the introduction of vaccination in today's world has made us secure against small pox. This reminds me of the stories that my grandparents told about how a small-pox epidemic killed dozens of people less than seventy years ago. World is definitely a much safer place to live than it used to be less a century ago with regard to safety against diseases.
Furthermore, access to food supplies has markedly increased for a lot of people around the world. Enhanced political stability and better government planning, along with improvements in international trade among nations has brought about food security in many countries. This means less risk of famines, more specifically when droughts occur. As I stated above, less than a century ago, my country Iran suffered from lack of life expectancy. My grandparents also convey memories about how the occurrence of droughts dramatically impacted access to food supplies for many people. Consequently, malnutrition and famine were in the past, which caused many children perish before they entered adulthood.
Conclusively, contemporary people enjoy more longevity rates in the today's world. Advances in health care system and more food availability has made this possible. Human beings seem to be even more resolute to increase life expectancy today.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 623, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nsequently, malnutrition and famine were in the past, which caused many children ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, furthermore, if, nevertheless, so, for example, to begin with, with regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1821.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 341.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34017595308 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87831667366 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.598240469208 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 586.8 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.1178750948 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.7142857143 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2380952381 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.61904761905 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0371582676551 0.236089414692 16% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0170363953249 0.076458572812 22% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0629217038631 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0281426622912 0.150856017488 19% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0379169188567 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 58.1214874552 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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