There is a controversial debate about whether people need the government's help to solve their problems or they can cope with their challenges by themselves. As it is a moot point, There might not be a general agreement on this topic. However, personally, I am of the belief that some problems are bigger than a person or his family's ability to be solved, so they need government or society help.
The first illustration which can demonstrate my opinion is that some problems are not personal problems, which many people face with them. Therefore, Solving these problems needs a tremendous amount of efforts which a person or a small group of individuals cannot handle them. These problems need a group of experts, a precise schedule, and investing a huge amount of money to be solved. To give a good example, one of the most important problems nowadays is the lack of jobs for youth. It is obvious that the creation of job opportunities is one of the government's responsibilities, and people cannot do this by themselves.
Also, it cannot go unnoticed that an individual's family's help cannot be always effective in solving a problem. Occasionally, people meet challenges which they never have had before, or their family does not have a precious experience to help him to deal with that issue. Hence, people need to ask an expert to help them. This situation is evident for physical illnesses or diseases; people have to visit a proper doctor to obtain the best cure since their family could not help them. Moreover, sometimes people need an expert not only for illnesses, but they need to consult with someone who has better experiences and can give them the best advice for their problems. For instance, they visit a psychologist to help them in their daily problems by his wise advice.
In the light of above-mentioned reasons, I am a proponent of the idea that people cannot cope with their problems by themselves, consequently, they need the government's help. I feel this way because not only do some problems need a larger scale of efforts to be solved, but also people might face problems that they have not seen before, so they do not have enough experience to solve them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, however, moreover, so, therefore, for instance, i feel
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1817.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 375.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84533333333 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79149947758 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.466666666667 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 563.4 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.6666458333 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.5625 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4375 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8125 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193746368805 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0781354407188 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0490416410534 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13987799247 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00573243239631 0.0645574589148 9% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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