There are many ways to learn new things. Some people are inclined to learn with their friends or co-workers. However, others prefer to choose expert's vision. As for me, learning new things with people who are teachers or supervisors is much more easier. I feel this way for 2 reasons, which I explore in my following essay.
First of all, learning new topic with same level people is not as easy as seemed. Even though it is free to share knowledge, these people can easily do same mistakes about topic and repeat themselves, which is the most obstacle point for learning progress. My own experience is a good example of this. I was studying in the university and we were doing the gradutation thesis as a group. Although we progressed our thesis in a short time, we stucked in some point and insisted on doing on our own then we failed to graduate. Next year I took on my own with my supervisor professor and I did quicklier than last tried because she could easily grasped my deficiencies and I graduated by success So, experts have profound knowledge about topic and we can do quickly and succeed with them
Second all of, when we do somethings or learn somethings with friend. after some specific time, there are likely to make jokes or start talking in each other and we lose our adaptation to lessons. However, if we learn with experts which we usually pay to them in that we do not want to waste any minutes and they usually do not let us when we want to try to change topic.
To sum up, studying with experts are the best way to progress and flourish. Teachers or supervisors usually experience points many times.So, they are able to find student's deficiency easily and they do not let to lose adaptation during the lessons
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...orkers. However, others prefer to choose experts vision. As for me, learning new ...
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Line 1, column 203, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...for me, learning new things with people who are teachers or supervisors is much more ea...
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Line 1, column 243, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
...who are teachers or supervisors is much more easier. I feel this way for 2 reasons, which I...
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Line 2, column 149, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...share knowledge, these people can easily do same mistakes about topic and repeat ...
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Line 2, column 249, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to progress'
Suggestion: to progress
...is the most obstacle point for learning progress. My own experience is a good example of...
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Line 2, column 644, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'grasp'
Suggestion: grasp
...han last tried because she could easily grasped my deficiencies and I graduated by succ...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: After
...things or learn somethings with friend. after some specific time, there are likely to...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: So
...rs usually experience points many times.So, they are able to find students deficie...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, so, then, as for, i feel, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1423.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 312.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.5608974359 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47775897333 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548076923077 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 441.0 618.680645161 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.2565052098 48.9658058833 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.8666666667 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.13333333333 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0848052921603 0.236089414692 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0371208584753 0.076458572812 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0420628639013 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.055725074797 0.150856017488 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0331920439567 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.17 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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