A glance at people attitude toward career brings to light a question that has provoked a discussion several times, that is, whether people work because of money or other factors influence their decision. More than five decades ago, people continued their family vocations because they had learnt a lot of information and skill about it. There was not any other opportunity for them to choose their careers. In contrast, modern people in this century face with a lot of career’s options and the money is not a big factor to work. Definitely, we cannot ignore the effect of money but satisfaction and intrinsic sociality of human kinds are two other reasons.
The foremost reason why people work lies in the fact that they want to be part a group and society. This need is met when they work in a friendly environment and participate in activities which make them closer. If a person cannot find a good job, he is more prone to mental diseases such as anxiety and depression. A recent study at Harvard University shows that employees who earn decent salaries but suffers from frantic boss have depression in higher rate than people who get lower salaries with kind manager. This study also states that it is more possible that people abandon their jobs when their work environment is dictatorial even if income is high. Thus, social aspect of work is a determinant factor.
Another subtle point that I should deem is the fact that each person has different talent and skill and enjoy spending time on it. For example, physicians earn the highest salaries in USA but it is not interesting for a lot of people to see blood and fracture every day. The only reason that make a person to enter medical school and tolerate night shifts and sleeplessness is love to this career. As a student in business school I believe it is really hard to devote all of your weekends to work on courses’ assignments and understand the concept of each lecture while not confuse them. But I really enjoy getting out of my comfort zone and struggle with new mathematics questions. I feel more usefulness this way even without an excellent salary.
Admittedly, we can count employment health insurance and Medicare benefits as minor reasons. It is difficult to pay off medical bills without insurance assistant, and a great insurance plan sponsored by employer is a positive effect. However, it is not very persuasive to think that people continue or discontinue to work because of health insurance. I still assert that the two former reasons are more determinant.
Due to the aforementioned argument explored in the previous statements, I believe that people need to be satisfied internally and be useful for society. In addition, an amiable work environment makes life happier and better.
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- A friend of yours has received some money and plans to use all of it either * to go on vacation * to buy a car Your friend has asked you for advice. Compare your friend`s two choices and explain which one you think your friend should choose. Use specific 70
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, really, so, still, thus, while, for example, i feel, in addition, in contrast, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2318.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 470.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93191489362 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70880394862 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 267.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568085106383 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 729.9 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.2498496302 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.782608696 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4347826087 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.78260869565 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.308692437778 0.236089414692 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0783790679537 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.059657064235 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157754490132 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0647471314607 0.0645574589148 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 86.8835125448 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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