Transporation is an important part of every individual. People need transportation vehicles to move from one place to another. In the given prompt, it is stated that there will be a decrease in the number of cars in the future than today. I strongly disagree with the given argument. I feel this way two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, as the living standard of the people improve, more people will want to buy luxurious items, as the car is taken as a luxurious item, people generally want to purchase them. With the advancement of the country, the economic conditions of the people residing in that country increases. Since, in this modern era, due to rapid industrialization, the economic conditions of the developing nations will improve in the near future, so there will be more cars in the future. My own country-Nepal is a compelling example of this. Ten years ago, there were only 150,000 cars in Nepal. however, at present, there are about 2,000,000 cars in Nepal. With the improvement of the economic conditions of the people, more people attracted to buy cars, as a result, more cars available in Nepal. Since, car buying rate per year is in increasing trends, which shows that there will be more cars in the future.
Secondly, with technological advancement, new cars will be created in the future, since people prefer to buy new cars there is a higher number of cars that will be available in the future. By using the same car, people don't feel satisfied and want to try a new car having more facilities. Since, due to global competition, more cars will be available at lower prices, so that an old design car will be available to the people having poor economic conditions. For example, Maruti car cost NPR 1,000,000 at an early period in Nepal, however, it cost NPR 600,000 only nowadays. Due to the improvement of economic conditions and the availability of new brands of cars, wealthy people will buy an expensive cars, and poor people can also purchase old brand cars at lower price, so there will be more cars available in the near future.
In conclusion, there will be more cars available in the future than today. Thjis is because, there will be improvement of the living conditions of the people in future, and because of the development of the new cars having many facilities, more people will buy them.
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- TPO12 Integrated Writing 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 590, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
... there were only 150,000 cars in Nepal. however, at present, there are about 2,000,000 ...
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Line 3, column 219, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...e future. By using the same car, people dont feel satisfied and want to try a new ca...
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Line 4, column 158, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
... of the living conditions of the people in future, and because of the development of the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, second, secondly, so, for example, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 43.0788530466 37% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1956.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 411.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75912408759 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72064074967 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.413625304136 0.524837075471 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 617.4 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.5529461257 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.8 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.55 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.25 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0448155448255 0.236089414692 19% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0181757988709 0.076458572812 24% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0217567929225 0.0737576698707 29% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0387590153094 0.150856017488 26% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0179268775355 0.0645574589148 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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