To remain happy and optimistic when you fail is more important than achieving success.
Since the dawn of civilization, being successful has had one of the greatest roles in people's lives from all over the world, for it has had the most prominent influence in their lives. Although some people believe that achieving success is more important for people, I firmly concur with the idea that people should be optimistic and happy when they fail. There are some reasons, the most outstanding of which will be discussed in the ensuing paragraphs.
Firstly, it is undoubted that so influential has acquiring experience been that it has had a great number of positive effects on people's lives all over the world, yet above all it has helped people to think about how they did in the past. As a matter of fact, if they be pessimistic and upset after failure, distraction thoughts lead them to another failure. To illustrate this fact, one needs only refer to numerous prosperous people learning a lot of lessons from their failure by being happy. An example will illustrate this viewpoint much better. Last time, I was reading a magazine about the invention of light bulb by Tomas Edison who was much stronger after each failure. I strongly believe that had he been unhappy and accepted his failure, he would not have invented the light bulb which was the greatest contribution in all era.
Secondly, it is established beyond doubt that on the one hand, some people believe that being optimistic result in people face another failure because people are not serious in accomplishing their work by being happy, yet on the other hand, some people believe that if people stay happy, they will be health in their lifetime. I strongly agree with the latter idea and I do believe that the more people think about pleasure things after failure, the more they will have healthy mind due to the fact that there are a lot of hard mental diseases which derived from accepting failure. By way of illustration, the noteworthy intelligible results, which are conducted in our country, show that approximately 90 percentage of healthy businessmen, are the ones who was happy after their failure and keep themselves away from catching any diseases.
To make a long story short, by considering all the aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that no one can deny the enormous positive effects of being happy on people's future. Not only are they able to use their own past experience to become successful, but also they will be health in their life time. For this reason, were I be a determiner in our country, I would have added one course for students named “how control ourselves after failure"
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 218, Rule ID: PAST_EXPERIENCE_MEMORY[1]
Message: Use simply 'experience'.
Suggestion: experience
...Not only are they able to use their own past experience to become successful, but also they wil...
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Line 4, column 294, Rule ID: LIFE_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'lifetime'?
Suggestion: lifetime
..., but also they will be health in their life time. For this reason, were I be a determine...
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Line 4, column 322, Rule ID: WERE_VBB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'where' or 'we'?
Suggestion: where; we
...th in their life time. For this reason, were I be a determiner in our country, I wou...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, as a matter of fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2159.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 442.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88461538462 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6187301482 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 675.0 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.5953027222 48.9658058833 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.933333333 100.406767564 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.4666666667 20.6045352989 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.06666666667 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0838590529664 0.236089414692 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0337312908486 0.076458572812 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.083704761191 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0679125644727 0.150856017488 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0807648316162 0.0645574589148 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 58.1214874552 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.62 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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