Environment problems are closely connected to both individual and society health. Recent years have seen a mount of news that companies make profits with environmental damages. Therefore, someone claims that the best way to address this issue is to ask more penalties, such as higher tax and larger fine. From my perspective, although adding tax could be effective to some extent, there are also better ways, like spending more money on new technology and raising awareness of public.
Admittedly, requiring more penalties from companies who caused damage to environment could help reduce this behavior. This is no one would enjoy losing their income which they have earned so hard. Therefore, to avoid paying the penalty, chemical factories which discharge polluted water would spare no effort to reduce the amount. Car manufactories would do their best to cut the exhaust every car could emit. However, those actions cannot get the root for even the price goes up, most companies can choose to pay if they can just raise the price to compensate the loss.
However, many companies are willing reduce the damage if they are provided new techniques which not only cause less damage but also ask less cost to make same products. As we now, the most essential goal of a company is to making profits. Therefore, if the government give more funding for research institutes to develop novel technology as descripted below, such as new energy to substitute fossil fuel, advance material to replace wood as construction material, then those profit-oriented company will be much happier to change, and even they ask the research institute to help apply new techniques to their product as soon as possible.
Moreover, to raise the awareness of customers will also be more effective thang simply to impose heavy penalties. For example, it is reasonable to instill the mind to children that the environmental damage is a vital problem and need to be done instantly by abandoning the products can cause damage at school. Then, children will ask their parents and neighborhoods to do so if we encourage them by give rewards. Those people and the government will then work together to wave an atmosphere of using environmental-friendly products. Therefore, many companies who produced products with environmental damage will find no ways but to change their companies’ strategy to invent and sell products which meets the public’s need if they want to keep their profits.
To sum up, there are some other ways that are more effective than requiring more penalties from companies who provide important products and service but cause damage to environment, since the government could give more funding aiming to find new technology and arouse environmental-friend awareness of public to push compony to reduce damage voluntarily.
- Governments should offer a free university education to any student who has been admitted to a university but who cannot afford the tuition 66
- Collectors prize the ancient life size clay statues of human figures made on Kali Island but have long wondered how Kalinese artists were able to depict bodies with such realistic precision Since archaeologists have recently discovered molds of human hea 63
- TOEFL T P O 3 Integrated Writing Task 52
- Some students prefer to study alone Others prefer to study with a group of students Which do you prefer Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 76
- TPO21 integrated 80
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, so, still, then, therefore, for example, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2382.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 455.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23516483516 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90201117857 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527472527473 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 748.8 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 89.4469461348 48.9658058833 183% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.333333333 100.406767564 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2777777778 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.16666666667 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.279624943505 0.236089414692 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0804586199877 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0668660298877 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165739340701 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0600420144289 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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