Teenage is the most different phase of the life! Looking at a teenager's life, a question comes into the mind, is it a good idea for teenagers to work while they are still studying? Well, many people believe teenagers should not be allowed to work and only forced to study but i have a different point of view. I take this all as the part of their training to become mature, independent adults. I have few reasons for this, which i will explain with relevant example in my ensuing text.
First of all, working part-time in a supermarket, grocery shop, or even at workshop teach them the importance of each and every job. They learn that no occupation is strange, or can make anybody inferior to somebody else, instead every occupation demand hard work and dedication. Not until one work hard would he be able to make money. Also these jobs can help them understand the importance of education, this will make them realize that even though these jobs demand hard work and body power, studies require use of brain, which in fact, is much more fun. Also, by studying harder they would be able to invent stuff, that can simplify these jobs. Mostly, apart from studying teenagers do not have much to do, so in fact it is a good idea to use their energies in doing something more productive.
Another point to be mentioned here is that, doing job will bring them a monthly wage. What happens is that getting money after working hard for the month make them realize the importance of money, which they simply ignore when it was coming from parents, without their own input. Not only it is a source of happiness for them but also make them respect there parents. Who work hard to make money for them. For instance, my little brother used to be done with his pocket money within 7 days, but after he started earning himself did he realize how precious it is. Now he is more into saving money! As he now says, it is no easy task to make money.
To cut a long story short, working as a teenager have its advantages which can not be ignored. Not only it develop their personality, make them more into studies, and help them understand the significance of money but also it is a way to make them realize the importance of the parents, who work really hard for their children.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 64, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'teenagers'' or 'teenager's'?
Suggestion: teenagers'; teenager's
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...lts. I have few reasons for this, which i will explain with relevant example in m...
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Line 2, column 337, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...rk hard would he be able to make money. Also these jobs can help them understand the...
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Line 4, column 108, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'develops'?
Suggestion: develops
...s which can not be ignored. Not only it develop their personality, make them more into ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, really, so, still, well, while, apart from, for instance, in fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1853.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 412.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.49757281553 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30495512453 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514563106796 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 585.9 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.1892260714 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.944444444 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8888888889 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94444444444 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141075397947 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0511050736549 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0605104470908 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.098688019368 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0708829040351 0.0645574589148 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.12 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.22 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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