Change is inevitable. As generations passed, technology has developed. The way of living has completely been altered. In the current world that we live in, modern technology is a major part of most people’s lives. I disagree that parents should forbid their children from owning smartphones. I will express why that is my opinion in the following essay.
Parents may feel that they should restrict their children from owning smartphones because in their time, smartphones were not necessary. However, times have changed. The vast majority of the population have access to the internet conveniently through their phones. Not owning one in this generation would hinder you from an abundance of things. The child may feel like they are missing out or have difficulty keeping in touch with people. One of my personal experiences with this was when my phone was taken away from me a few years ago. My father felt that a smartphone really was not requisite in my life. During that period, I could not connect with my friends or make plans to meet up, which does not seem like a huge deal, but as a youngster, it was a big part of my life. Socializing was made harder cause I was not aware of the current news that my peers were chattering about. At this day and age, a child without a smartphone might feel like an outcast surrounded by people with a smartphone.
There is no right way of being raised. A childhood without a smartphone may seem like the ideal way because it is the norm just because that is how it has been till now. But, things evolve. Growing up with a smartphone is not wrong, it is just different from how things have been in the past. Parents should not compare their childhood to their child’s as they are living in a completely different time. Currently, smartphones are being used for numerous things, such as a map to give you directions, to listen to music, to take pictures, to connect to people from all over the world. A life without a smartphone is attainable but not practical contemporarily because everybody else around you has access to the internet at the tip of their fingers.
Instead of restricting smartphones, I believe it would be far better for parents to teach their children self-control. Self-control is an important ability a person could use long-term throughout their life. A child should know his/her limitations. Their life should not revolve around their phone. Owning a smartphone could possibly be one of the ways a child learns self-control. I personally have learned to use my phone less. It was my own realization. Self-control happens through an individual’s own willingness. If my parents forcibly took my smartphone away, I would not have learned self-control, instead, I would have sought to have my smartphone more.
In conclusion, I believe that smartphones should not be viewed as a negative tool to grow up with. Times have changed, and contemporary, it would be more practical to own a smartphone. Smartphones can also be a way for a child to learn self-control.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 320, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'could'.
Suggestion: could
...around their phone. Owning a smartphone could possibly be one of the ways a child learns self-...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, really, so, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 15.1003584229 212% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2526.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 519.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86705202312 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7730044521 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89499533532 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472061657033 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 759.6 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 35.0 20.6003584229 170% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.9014392622 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.1714285714 100.406767564 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.8285714286 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.8 5.45110844103 33% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 23.0 4.88709677419 471% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169673238544 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0445107487309 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0481723197404 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0988380305735 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0159091745889 0.0645574589148 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.37 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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