No one can cast a shadow of doubt on the fact that education is an essential part of future of youth generation. One of the most contentious questions, which is often raised regarding this issue, is whether that/it is the best to utilize limited time of busy parents to do some school related work of their children coupled with(?) or not. I strongly contend that parents should be apprised(aware?) of all the details of their young children. I subscribe to the idea that there are a number of thought-provoking reasons behind this fact, which are elaborated upon hereunder.(The thesis is vague!)
First of all, one should take into account the fact that parents need to have sufficient and careful monitoring on the school related works of their young generation; that is to say, a large number of students have influential spirit (?)and they are impressed by people's mood and atmosphere who have further connection to them during the day, so they are exposed to inevitable events; it is a of great importance that children have to be under the supervision of their parents and . The noteworthy statistics, revealed by a recent psychological research conducted at the University of Tehran, show that 95 percent/the majority of young generation who are monitored by their parents could gain precious experience and achieve further success.
Another equally important point is that students are encountered with exhausting and overwhelming issues during their educational period, so they need to have some joyful and delightful time and keep away from these fruitless works. With this in mind, parents have a critical role to ameliorate some entertainment for them; they could implement some school works with each other and provide prodigious incentive. Some children would fancy for own hero on their mother or father(?), so they would like to be corroborated by their own hero. To shed light on this issue, my younger brother did not wish to do their homework and one day my father decided to help him and have some fun, all the time my father tried to persuade him to do his task simultaneously he tried to make cheerful and fulfill his pleasure,(?) in the end of the day my brother became an assiduous student.
In short, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that parents should have sufficient advocacy on their children.! It would be unfair not to mention the fact that if parents do not assess their children' problems and take extra care of their homework or issues, it triggers them lazy. Nevertheless, there exist a plethora of other reasons, supporting the above statement, which could be alluded to but are embraced due to the dearth of time.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, nevertheless, regarding, so, in short, first of all, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2218.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 448.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95089285714 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81748901576 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529017857143 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 684.0 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 20.1344086022 169% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 151.973681932 48.9658058833 310% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 170.615384615 100.406767564 170% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.4615384615 20.6045352989 167% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.38461538462 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275113444188 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0856204022414 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0707035608324 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168595045149 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0239902692775 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.1 11.7677419355 162% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.43 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.1575268817 152% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 10.0537634409 155% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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