Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer?
In the reading passage, the author claims that the silver coin does not brought to North America by the Norse, who were European explorers traveled acroos the Atlantic ocean, by pointing out three reasons of support. However, finding all the idea implausible and questionable, the professor casts doubt on what is presented in the text and states that there are strong evidence which coorroborates that the Norse were in contanct with North America.
At first,the author argues that the long distance between Maine and North America, which was the settelment of the Norse, makes their conection infeasible. Conversely, the lecturer contend that there are some other subjects in addition to the coin in that region. Therefore, there is a viable explanation for this proof. In fact, thaving traveled to North America, they obtained some objects. On the way back to Maine, they brought the coin back with themselves.
In addition, the reading passage holds the view that unavailability of other objects aside from the coin render this idea impersuasive. On the other hand, the professor dismisses this point by clarifying the fact that the Norse were not permament settellers. In fact,having moved to another region, they packed all of their precious possessions. Consequently, it is not weird that when they back to North America, nothing left behind them since they carried and brought them to the new place.
Finally, the author asserts that theire is not any justification that explains the aim of carrying silver coin to North amerca while they knew the coins could not have been regarded as a money. The professor, though, disputes this idea by subscribing the fact that the Norse were awar of this issue that they can trade with whatever seems appealing for those living in North america. Subsequently, as far as silver coins were attractive for indivudulas such as jweleries or necklesser, they could use them as a means to trade.
From a broad perspective, in the current states of affairs we face, in which so busy becomes parents with their job in today's world that rarely do they find sufficient time to spend with their children. Therefore, it is not far-fetched to presume that they should allocate this time to the best efficient way. However, whether playing with them is better choice rather than assisting them with teir homeworks depends on the lens through which one is looking. There is a growing segment of people who contend this idea that sparing time with children to provide more fun for them has a variety of advantages for kids. I personally concur with this idea, and in the ensuing paragraph, the ratinale behind this opinion will be further elaborated.
First and most exquisite point coming the mind to substantitate my standpoints ia concerned with the rather well-developed education system in modern societies. Hardly can anyone deny the fact that this inadequet time is prevailing in modern soceties which represent multiplie obstacles for people. Therefore, regardless of these challeneges, there are some postitive facets either. Indeed, having worked hard, these individulas incline to open up best ppossible facilities for the cities in which they live. Undoubtdly, advance ducation system is an integral part of these faciltiies that has undertaken the reposnisbilites of overwhelming majority section of children's education. Families are witnesses the students that do not have any assignement at home. The knwoledgeable lecturers assist the student in a professional manner that make them needless to get help from their parents. In this cirsumstance, apparently, parents are able to assgin enough time to play and have fin with their kids since they no longer become apprehensive regarding their schoolworks.
Another vital point which should be taken into consideration is the children's need to fulfull their natural requirements. Needless to say that each stage of life has its own particular needs. In the childhood it is imparative to have sufficient physical acitivities. Moreover, the fundamnetal characteristics of a person are built in this period of time, and it is of the utmost important for children that do not concentrat on mere one aspect of their life. According to the latest research attributing to Dr. Kevin rude, a prominent professor in the Department of Pshycology at the University of Macquarie, 80% of the suprelative students become one-dimensional people in the future since they can notexpress themsleves through other way rather than too much working or studying. This probe corroborates further legitimact of this idea that if parents allocated too much attention to their child's school things, they would hinder their kids progress in various fileds.
To wrap it up, it is more judicious to say that parents ought to pay enought attention to their children playing. Not only do not today's kids require too much time for their academic issues, but also their personlaities' growth is highly dependent on being involved in a myraid activities.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 73, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'bring'
Suggestion: bring
...or claims that the silver coin does not brought to North America by the Norse, who were...
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Line 2, column 9, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
... contanct with North America. At first,the author argues that the long distance be...
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Line 3, column 266, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , having
...e were not permament settellers. In fact,having moved to another region, they packed al...
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Line 4, column 186, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'money'.
Suggestion: money
...e coins could not have been regarded as a money. The professor, though, disputes this i...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ey could use them as a means to trade. From a broad perspective, in the current...
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Line 7, column 807, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a professional manner" with adverb for "professional"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...oledgeable lecturers assist the student in a professional manner that make them needless to get help fro...
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Line 8, column 339, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...teristics of a person are built in this period of time, and it is of the utmost important for ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, consequently, conversely, finally, first, however, if, look, moreover, regarding, so, therefore, well, while, in addition, in fact, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 15.1003584229 205% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 34.0 11.0286738351 308% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 88.0 43.0788530466 204% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 113.0 52.1666666667 217% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 21.0 8.0752688172 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 4218.0 1977.66487455 213% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 809.0 407.700716846 198% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21384425216 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.33319091226 4.48103885553 119% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84222593416 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 416.0 212.727598566 196% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514215080346 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 1280.7 618.680645161 207% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 12.0 3.08781362007 389% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 15.0 4.94265232975 303% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 35.0 20.6003584229 170% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.3426432624 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.514285714 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1142857143 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.17142857143 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 4.53405017921 176% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219239192032 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0527154398856 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0515220322993 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100473595931 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0705996620355 0.0645574589148 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 225.0 86.8835125448 259% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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