Some people like to keep a record of their own experiences by uploading pictures and other information to social-networking sites. Other people prefer not to create such records.Which approach do you prefer, and why?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In todays society with the social media platforms being prevelant many people upload their experiences onto these platforms while others don't and may even criticize them saying that their putting their private lives on the show, I believe that keeping records from different experiences and sharing them with others is a beneficial action. I will discuss my reasonings in the following essay.
First, the pictures and videos uploaded allows us to have an organized and well developed shelf of our experiences making it easier to access them when wanting to review particular experiences and even reminance by remembering the time we had during them. for example, after finishing a project for a data science competetion me and my two team mates uploaded our experience and even reports of our work. After three years I still go and read the reports uploaded at that time to get an inspiration for my new work and every time it brings a smile to my face thinking of the hardships and achievements of the time we had together.
Second, even if the records gathered of the experience are accidentally lost, the files are well kept in the sites and can be restored using them. A friend of mine recently lost a lot of files from her PC this led to her losing a big chunk of data and photos with no way of restoring them after a while she remembered having uploaded some of them to her social-networking site at this notion she was so happy she was crying.
Third, when we upload an experience people with more experience may come and comment on our work leading to our improvement and people with less or no experience can learn from our experience. For example, I have been agonizing over how to study for TOEFL test but there were many people that had uploaded their experiences in social platforms like instagram this allowed me to get an idea about where to start my studying journey and how to continue it.
In conclusion, based on above reasonings I believe sharing and keeping records of experiences is a worthwhile and helpful action.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, so, still, third, well, while, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1687.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 355.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75211267606 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68015105556 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532394366197 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 534.6 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.6003584229 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 20.1344086022 174% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.7294865585 48.9658058833 165% => OK
Chars per sentence: 168.7 100.406767564 168% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.5 20.6045352989 172% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.6 5.45110844103 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206594460748 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0848850780882 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0560095292192 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125290742158 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0538854671824 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.7 11.7677419355 159% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.41 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.1575268817 156% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 10.002688172 200% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.0537634409 159% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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