Some people like to keep a record of their own experiences by uploading pictures and other information to social-networking sites. Other people prefer not to create such records.Which approach do you prefer, and why?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, people have access to the internet all over the world, and there are many social networks that people use to share their experiences and ideas. While some believe that it is a good idea to share pictures and information online, others think otherwise. As far as I am concerned, I totally believe that people should not upload their pictures and other information on the internet for everyone to see. The reasons why I think so will be elaborated upon hereunder.
First of all, some people might have a bad feeling about seeing those pictures and information. I mean, many people post their photos when they are on trips or vacations. They usually eat fancy food, stay in luxurious hotels, and try to show off with all the pictures they share online. Obviously, not everyone can afford such trips. When others see those pictures, they feel unfortunate and miserable, because they can not enjoy such vacations. For example, one of my friends has a wealthy family. He often goes to expensive trips, even abroad, and posts a lot of pictures of his journey on Instagram. Those of us who cannot afford such trips feel really bad. Some feel sorry for themselves because they work all day and do not have enough money, but He is having fun all the time.
Second, sharing information and pictures online is not a safe idea. There are some sociopaths in every society, and sharing exact information might stimulate these sick people. My own experience demonstrates this reality. A few months ago, in my home town, a terrible thing happened. Some girls went to the mountains for hiking by themselves. They constantly posted pictures of themselves and information about where they are and where they want to go next on Facebook. Since Facebook is a popular social network, everyone could see that information. A dangerous criminal saw the posts and knew that where they are and the fact that they are alone. He went there and ambushed them and unfortunately raped those poor girls. I think if they did not share that much information, they would be safe.
In conclusion, with all this taken into account, I strongly believe that it is a bad idea to share pictures and information online. Some people cannot afford it and get a bad feeling. Also, it is not a safe thing to do.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, second, so, while, for example, i mean, i think, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1890.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 395.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78481012658 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55481047466 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524050632911 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 600.3 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.8550924606 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.6923076923 100.406767564 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1923076923 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.07692307692 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193482181426 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0561219416377 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.052445976322 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138904537822 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0845554267834 0.0645574589148 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.85 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.3 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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